On faraway lands where the Chinese culture meets a Korean nuance, a strange Curse befalls Helial. It may ruin his life entirely, or it may not.
From a Korean video-game scenario which follows the Immortality genre design of Chinese fantasy novels, in a world outlined by Classical elements as well, nothing compares the call of freedom.
While contrastingly different worlds get in touch volume after volume, this brand-new genre explores new horizons that traditional fantasy literature has never reached before.
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Hi, everyone! I've already read the first book of this novel in Italian language and I really Love it! I can assure that the story will gets better and better even if it starts a bit slowly, it has a truly unique plot so if you are looking for something different give it a try! I think it's a must read in my humble opinion! :)
One of the worst stories i read in a long time.filled with plot armour.the mc is partially dumb and retarded with feeling almost similar to ****** towards his sister who is a cocky,ungrateful,b*tch. If you are going to read this i warn you - the author has a very weird and twisted sense of love .
Found another hidden gem ! This novel deserve my spirit stones ! Oh i'm so happy with myself ^^ 140 characters my ass 140 characters my ass 140 characters my ass 140 characters my ass 140 characters my ass 140 characters my ass 140 characters my ass 140 characters my ass 140 characters my ass
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This novel is a perfect mix of standard chinese novels with immortals and videogame-like life. This novel has a level system with abilities, classes and so on like a videogame Helial is a poor teenager that lives with little sister all by themselves in a small town since she was a newborn. He works to gain some money to be able to mantain his sister and him, he also train to become stronger so that he can improve his sister's life. They have a bigger brother that abandoned them. One day Helial got cursed by a mysterious sword that reduced his strenght stat to 0.05x. After that... This is just a summary of the first 1 or 2 chapters to let you know the background In my opinion this novel is just beautiful, well written and the character design is superb, if you start you will not be able to stop reading, the first chapters have a lot of flashbacks, then the story starts and becomes better and better. I also love the fact that some historical and mythological characters are revised and present in the novel
The way the author forces in flash back in basically every chapter is seriously annoying. It just breaks the flow of the whole story and makes it all seem awkward just to dump in info, and sometimes the info is useless. I rather you make a few chapters at the start to do the info dumping, and provide the background of the world than forcing bits and peices of it everywhere. In general, the plot is progressing slowly, with some bs here and there but its ok if you want to pass time
Pretty weak story with horrible characters.Mc gets random power ups and passes every impossible fight just by thinking of his sister and getting plot armor.Wierd disgusting ****** relationship between mc and his 10 years old.Constant flashbacks with no relevant info in the middle of a chapter for no reason.
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I like the story but the author gave me headache. Every chapter have a flash back like when you are watching na/eu actions like 'arrow' or 'the flash'. And its annoying, well i can read up to 7 to 9 hours straight but with this novel...uhm i can't... Too many details to process in one chapter. Its worth giving it a try i guess. Maybe its just me who hates this kind of format. Well, thats it.. I hope thats for an honest review..
I dropped this novel, the story have a good premise, but the way the author writhes makes me puke blood. The POV change so much that i want to punch the screen and with the number of flashbacks combined you could write another book. Every chapter there is a change is the pov that totaly breaks the flow of the story. The protagonist is the self-image of every tenage shonen manga protagonist and his sister is anoying as well. Good luck with the novel and hope you improve your skills 👍
Sir Flow, I have read until chapter 5(included), so this review will be based on your first five chapters. Writing Quality; I didn't come across typing mistakes, but there were a few missing words. There were some unnecessarily wordy sentences, but I have never bothered myself with it when reading. I think sometimes even wordy sentences are necessary. You know better than me, sometimes who have to use that word, and your 'wordies' aren't smirking to the reader when reading. :) There are three more serious points in your chapters(Not in your writing quality). Chapters are toooo long. I picked a random chapter, copied it to the Microsoft word, and it said to me there were more than 2.5k words. That isn't actually a problem, but when combined with your too long paragraphs and unnecessary descriptions, it is deadly serious. With short paragraphs, readers will find it easier to read, and it will help retain them. Readers find novels via phone app and website. If you have large paragraphs, readers will find it harder to keep up/read. You are describing almost everything in a scene. You should categorize them under two subjects. The descriptions readers would care and wouldn't care. 'Forcing myself to read' term comes from these mistakes in my opinion. Considering your writer carrier in Italy, and you having an editor, my rating for you is 3.5/5. Stability of updates; There is nothing to say. You released 86 chaps in just 94 days. It is a 5/5 in my book. Story development; In my opinion, this is the most complicated aspect of a novel when reviewing it. I have read only 5 chapters, some of the authors even reading less when reviewing. We can't know what will happen in the story. I mean we can be suddenly in a reverse corner in the face of an event in the stories development and everything before the event can gain meaning instantly. I'll only judge one point. Why did you put the flashback in the second chapter? And a long flashback at that. You could put it in a later chapter, or you could keep it ******. The sword picked up my interest in the first chapter, and puff! It disappeared in the second chapter. That's why I am giving you 4/5. Character design; Again it is early to judge with only reading 5 chapters. All I can say everything is looking normal in the first five chapters. As long as the characters don't have contradictions in their characters, it is ok. So, 4,5/5. I didn't give 5/5, because they aren't perfect. World background; Some things weren't clear enough, or I couldn't understand. Are they in a game? If not, is he aware of his system? Or is it everyone's system(like a shared interface)? How much mana does Helial have? These kinds of questions kept popping out in my mind. I won't be harsh about world background since it is early for an accurate judgment. 3.5/5 for the world background. P.S; Story is good actually. After reading chap 5, I had the feeling that things will get lively. If the novel didn't have the negative points that I had talked about earlier in this review, I would read it, honestly, despite not having much time after me becoming an author in webnovel. One more thing, Sir Flow had said before, the original story has already reached more than 300 chapter count and it is number one web novel in Italy. I believe your current self is much different from the you from years ago. Keep up the good work :)
Ohhhh mah goaj So-s-so much FILL-f-filler. No but seriously what is all this filler? Nai.ve mc with no logic at friggin all like bruh. 140140140140140140140140140
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