Mafia Son's System [Dropped]

TL:DR - Good idea but bland execution. Have you ever read those boring xianxia stories? Even though they have good ideas, most of them fail to deliver and this one feels something like that—now don't misunderstand, I like this, it feels good because the Protagonist is evil and doesn't care about anything. Everyone feels bland and goes the way the mc wants them to go, it's like theyre just here for the Protagnotist. I have a tip for you - think of every character as the Protagonist of their own story, and you'll have an easier time with imagining their life and personality. GOOD LUCK

Halola, Author here. Since I collected some ideas and story drafts over the time I decided to finally transform them into a novel. Be warned, I'm quite inexperienced after all, and also only treat writing as my hobby (meaning I'll mostly try to do 3-4 chapters a week, could be more or less let's see). The chapters will mostly be short too. But anyway, I'm just trying to write a story here and not win a prize :D Bear with me!

Hi! This is kera, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.