Azure Lightning

Interesting story, there is potential for it to be great depending on how you intend to write it. You should name your chapters instead of leaving it as chapter 1 2 etc... This helps the reader know what to expect from the chapter. Split you paragraphs into smaller once, some of them are too huge. Nobody likes to read long wall of text.

Author here, this is my first novel. It's very much inspired by IET style of writing. If you like a fun power progression story come read planning on updating a chapter every other day.

Story Premise (3 out of 5): - MC has amnesia, don't know where he comes from, tries to find out. Also has a mentor. Not new, but there's that. Writing Quality (4 out of 5): - Grammar and vocabulary are good. Split the paragraph into smaller ones for the readers to enjoy reading. Spend some time editing each chapters, since there a lot of missing commas, punctuations, etc. Story Development (4 out of 5): - Slow-paced. It's fine this way, but there's not much to learn after five chapters through. Other than that, it's great so far. Character Design (4 out of 5): - If there's one thing I want to point out regarding this, is that the MC has no description of himself(?). I don't know how it looks like. The other characters I could grasp perfectly, but the MC is bland. Too little dialogue. World (4 out of 5): - Again, slow paced. Not much to be said, other than a mainland, a forest, and Flaming Lance.

Interesting story so far looking forward to seeing how it progresses. A lot of potential hopefully it can live up to it. The concept really reminds me of a lot Chinese novel's except moving at a faster pace.

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The battle scenes in this is good. The writing flows fairly well. The only advice I would have to give to the author is to better describe the main character. I am excited to see where this might go in the future.

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The cultivation system is very interesting. I look forward to see where it goes from this point on. I think if it's developed properly this story could be really great. Though the formatting of the paragraphs can be long at times.

Good start, interesting concept, and well written. You just need to break up your paragraphs more since some people have trouble with walls of text.