The Mage of the Millennium
A single water droplet rises millimeters at the will of a young boy, but in mere seconds it joins the icy puddle at his feet. Nothing out of the ordinary for Pithar Pyreye. His whole body shivers as the frosty wind numbs his fingers, but he refuses to give in.
His whole life he’s been classified as a failure. A cripple. Ridiculed by his brothers and “friends.” His only comfort, magic that he can’t cast.
The Magi Trials looming close, Pithar’s determined to succeed at any cost. His fate rested upon it. Pushed to his limits, he discovers power hidden deep within him which enables him to achieve his goal, but at a great expense - his life.
Unfortunately for him, his powers are unacceptable in Kyriacus and the once prodigious boy sees his predictions unfold as his own father sets out to execute him. With his immense knowledge gained from clearing out the majority of libraries in the kingdom, he must escape his impending death and explore a world unfamiliar to him.
Follow the journey of an innocent noble boy as he discovers all the hidden secrets of the pandora's box unleashed. He unintentionally becomes the greatest mage ever known as he reaches the extremes of each emotion, which he discovers magic is based on. His journey is ridden with treachery, death, and misfortune, but he has the remains of pandora’s box with him, Hope.
I really like this story so far. The beginning of the story was very detailed and descriptive. I am looking forward to the next few chapters of the book. If you are into fantasy stories, definitely would recommend ten out of ten.
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This has the potential to be one of the best original novels on this website. I like the MC and the layered relationships that have been shown so far. Hopefully it builds from the great potential it has shown into something great.
So I feel like the story is off to a good start. The main character has been established and a temporary goal is being pursued. Its an interesting take on a mage and his journey. If you like magic and mages this is decent story to read. ---------------------------------- You do need to work on grammar here and there. Overall its not that bad. 4/5 It is fine to take breaks in updates as long as you put it in author notes or make up with it with a bundle of new chapters. 3/5 The story interesting and I'm wondering what decision they're going to make after he completes the trials. 5/5 The characters seem fine and as the story progresses you learn more about them. 5/5 The background is where I was the most disappointed in. I feel like you put a lot more work into here. The reader needs to feel like they're in the location with all the action taking place. You did a better job of this later on, but keep it in the back of your mind. 3/5 Overall good novel. Just keep a steadier release schedule and put more into the background. You can always go back and update earlier chapters so don't stress on grammar and punctuation too much. Best of luck and enjoy writing the story.
I love the fantasy genre and I love seeing new things within the genre. A weak noble has been done before, but this is truly different. None before were really described as crippled, but rather just shameful to their family. Love Pithar so far and really want him to grow as a character. Also love me some romance so I like that relationship between Aerin and Pithar. Hope it develops into something there. *wink* Keep it up!
Alright so I like the main character so far. He's quite interesting. A lot of fantasy novels use the trope of the weak peasant becoming strong, but the idea of a noble being weak is a very interesting area to explore. The story and content looks good, but man your writing needs a step up. Put the proper punctuation where it's necessary. It's really important. I'll continue following the story and really like it, but it's slightly difficult to read sometimes. The wording can also use a little bit of work. Good Luck!
It's pretty well written. There a few grammatical errors, but overall the content is very good. Great plot and character development so far and I can't wait to see where the story goes from here!
Looking great so far with mc's background and world building. I would say its a great start. ....................................................................
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The writing is quite decent. Few spelling and grammar errors. Good descriptions of the MC's emotions. Could use some more descriptions though (i.e. the examination room, what does it look like aside from the banners). A promising start. Keep up the good work.
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You can tell how good a story is going to be based on the synopsis and man....what a really great synopsis. I can already tell that this is going to be a wonderful one. I won't start reading this now because of so little chapters, but I will save it to my library and come back once it has a decent amount.
*Remember, this review is based on the first 5 chapters* Constructive Criticism: (If complete, ignore until the next *) You have not updated for the past 3 months and did not seem to give a reason as to why the novel is not being updated, I suggest mending this issue*. This may not be true in the future chapters, I would not know, but your first 5 chapters feel a bit predictable... I suggest trying to think outside the box a bit more.;,;. And last criticism... I feel having a prologue of Merlin's Story would be a helpful idea when it comes to understanding the world background. Positive Feedback: You did well with your Character Design and with your Writing quality, and did not lack much in Story Development nor World Background.;,;. Personal Feedback: I am actually debating whether to continue reading this or not, It feels like it may be dropped, but I think it's a good story, and if it'll continue, I want to continue with it.;,;. Score: WQ&CD 5/5 SoU 3/5 SD&WB 4/5