POV switch to third person was a good decision. It needs an editor but what story doesn't? If you find one that works for praise, send them my way when you're done with them :D The MC's power is definitely a new twist on a classic!
5 years ago
2
Dan_Ryder
An enjoyable read. It's still a little rough around the edges, but what web novel isn't. You can connect to the characters however and the author has done a good job world-building. Keep up with the excellent work author.
5 years ago
1
Chainslock
The story is narrated good, but I assume English isn’t the author’s first language. There are awkward tenses. But the important thing here is the concept. Good job on that! It is very intriguing. Mirai and Julietta are by far my favorite characters.
I won’t spoil for her power, but it’s a good twist. Ridiculously good and unique. Very much recommended~
5 years ago
1
Velcr
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5 years ago
1
LAUDAsan
This story has a mature feel to it and you get the cool vibe peculiar to the Japanese setting. This one is also unique that even though the protagonist is female, it sure will entertain a male audience too with this kind of plot filled with action and.. Read it yourself to find out more!
Reveal Spoiler
POV switch to third person was a good decision. It needs an editor but what story doesn't? If you find one that works for praise, send them my way when you're done with them :D The MC's power is definitely a new twist on a classic!
An enjoyable read. It's still a little rough around the edges, but what web novel isn't. You can connect to the characters however and the author has done a good job world-building. Keep up with the excellent work author.
The story is narrated good, but I assume English isn’t the author’s first language. There are awkward tenses. But the important thing here is the concept. Good job on that! It is very intriguing. Mirai and Julietta are by far my favorite characters. I won’t spoil for her power, but it’s a good twist. Ridiculously good and unique. Very much recommended~
Reveal Spoiler
This story has a mature feel to it and you get the cool vibe peculiar to the Japanese setting. This one is also unique that even though the protagonist is female, it sure will entertain a male audience too with this kind of plot filled with action and.. Read it yourself to find out more!