After years of running from her family, the estranged Mio, returns home.
She returns determined to break a marriage agreement between her and another gang. However, she is shocked when she finds out, that it is more complicated than she thought.
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Whoo! Mafia and love! The protagonist, Mio, is a strong female lead, which is a plus. I liked the interactions between her minions and the mysterious Jacob entering the fray. While the story had just begun, I cannot say that much about it. The grammar is fine, but there are some punctuation errors here and there along with awkward phrasings. But, keep writing author! Fight on! >3</
Adoi, sayah lage mau INI, apasai lage tungo lambat lage adah baru chapter, 2long cepat lah!!!! Saya mau INI character mio, dia banyak pandai, Jacob, tungo sikit nanti u lagi sayang banyak mio, hehehe
I like female lead; strong and fun. Interesting and entertaining story so far. Writing quality is good, Character designs is good as well. Great work author.
Interesting so far, I like the ML personality the most. I feel in the future, the girl will get 'play' by him and not her. Hahaha. Good job, keep going author~
Hello, your novel has been assessed and review by Virtual Bookshelf. The review is as follows: Many of the same remarks that I made in your other novel, Magic of Ages, remain the same in this novel. Thus, I will only point out the differences. Mio doesn’t have as much appeal as Izzy, and the male characters aren’t as well defined or differentiated from character tropes as Ruben was. In general, everyone is following the designated character roles similar to novels with the same type of storyline. The plot as well, moves a little slower. Now, some of this may be due to the genre. Romance Fiction in a mundane world heavily relies on small elements, mainly the interpersonal relationships, as opposed to visual and action-oriented genres like Fantasy. Even so, try to include more varied actions that build up into a greater event. To differentiate these characters, think of their backstories, motivations, and idiosyncrasies. For comparison, view the full reviews of both which are linked to your title on: https://virtualbookshelf.home.blog/2019/02/02/webnovel-assessments-10/ After three chapters, you may request to be assessed again. Thank you, and the best of luck on your writing endeavors! :)
This has been so fun to read. The moments between Mio and her minions are so fun to read and the chapters are decent size as well. Mio seems like a very interesting character tbh. Much more fun then your typical cliche Female Mc
Hard to pick out what I like best about this story-the cute relationship Mio has with her minions Hong and Long, learning that Ayase isn't a ho and the transformation tomboy into lady, or the ambiguous Jacob and his weird bodyguard. Nicely done!
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