The Snow God's Lost Daughter

Hello, your novel has been assessed and reviewed by Virtual Bookshelf. A review excerpt is as follows: Technical & Writing Style: No real criticisms here. Your punctuation and grammar is correct throughout, and you use a variation of sentence structures to make it interesting. Your paragraphing is also well done. The dialogue too doesn’t dominate the character’s interactions and is interspersed with their thoughts, feelings, and gestures. You have good descriptions where necessary. The only part that interrupted your consistency is the word “crèches” in chapter 4. While it means nursery, it is British and originally french, so it doesn’t fit in a Chinese novel. It’s ok to use the word nursery instead. Characters: Xueshan, Ren – Although the snow god’s proposal seems rather sudden, this isn’t uncommon for gods of all cultural myths to “love at first sight.” The differentiation of the “her own country’s gods were perfect gentlemen in comparison,” was nice. He has a good sense of humor, and she is likable and relatable in her struggles and concerns. Shaonu – In chapter three, her declaration to ruin the couple is somewhat laughable for her as the antagonist; it’s typical of a jealous woman, but the way she speaks is rather fresh; although, it seems in general, that is how the gods speak here. “should demons in hell crack my bones to suck out the marrow, I will see them suffer first.” Even though she plays an integral part in spurring the initial predicaments, she’s somewhat of a forgettable character. Chang-o, Pi-hsia-yuan-chun, the rest at the wedding – These names are rather unique btw, even for a Chinese name. The first two’s characters aren’t covered completed, but it is enough for the events at hand. .........(cont.) The full review: https://virtualbookshelf.home.blog/2019/02/02/review-the-snow-gods-lost-daughter-charlotte8/ After three chapters, you may request to be assessed again. Thank you, and the best of luck on your writing endeavors! :)

Even though the story is just starting it really feels so real! The actions and the circumstances that's happening around the protagonist's is connected to the experiences that most of people around the world are experiencing. But please update 😃 will be looking forward to it 😉

The plot is good, one can see it will fan out in the future chapters. The character development and writing proficiency is amazing although there are some grammatical errors, but the story makes up for it. If someone is looking for anything new, then this is your cup of tea. Good work👍

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This novel has a very interesting premise to it. I've always been interested in those who can use Ice. I think you can do lots of cool things with it. The story is lovely as well. And well like you said who doesn't like faceslap. That's so satisfying to read

I loved the story. It grasped me from the very beginning. I've always been a very big fan of ice users. But that wasn't the only thing that drew me. From the character development to the plot, everything is so exquisite. Though I don't understand how the girl so readily agreed to marry that God. XD Keep up the good work. Looking forward to read more chapters.

The story seems good so far. I enjoy how descriptive it is and the writing is quite good. I implore you to space out your paragraphs more to make it less compact, Other than that I like it keep it up!

Whoah. This book is incredibly awesome. The storyline is beyond words. I just couldn't bring myself to drop the book. I practically read all through the night. Nice work dear author

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I don't often give out 5-star reviews, and while we are only 10 chapters in - it might be a bit early, but what the heck. The writing is perfect, the character design is great, and so far the story is progressing really well. I am dying to see where you go with this.

Since so many other people have done it, I am going to review my own work! I think it's great, of course, and that you should read it. At present, I am trying to update at least five times a week, but I also work, so it may be challenging to keep up. I hope to get a good stockpile of chapters built up over this weekend. Thank you and enjoy!

This is very well written. In fact, it's pretty amazing how you manage to make me hate Brandi yet feel sympathy for her at the same time, and that's just one example. I'm not sure it belongs in Romance, but I trust that you will get there eventually.