This is a story about two YouTubers named, Markiplier, and Jacksepticeye. The two are best friends until one day, Sean (Jacksepticeye) confessed to Mark (Markiplier) that he has romantic feelings towards him.

Mark, who says no to Sean's request for a date, starts to question his sexuality; not knowing if he said the right thing.

Now, Sean spends most of his days crying on the floor and no longer posts YouTube videos onto his channel.

All of Sean's fans are now turning to Mark for answers, but he says he doesn't know why, but deep inside he does.

Septiplier: One Day He Cries

Ok,I like both Mark and Sean but overall I was disappointed with this story... 
1). There was no real timeline until what chapter 16 & 17?  
2). Both Mark and Sean are strong with a gentle side to them but the amount of crying they did in such a short amount of time was way too much and most of it made no sense
3). There was no explanation to how long they had feelings for eachother or even the thought of it 
4). There should have been something along the lines of:
  A. Beginning- An explanation to the readers that Mark and Sean have been friends for a long time, and (for example): Sean had invited Mark over because they were planning to do a series of videos together. (BTW: Real fans know that Sean lives in the U.S. now not U.K.)
B. Next, talk about what they were working on, include their dialogue and jokes etc... Tell the readers that they kept having to re-do certain scenes over and over again because they were messing around a bunch just enjoying each others company. You could literally make the first 2-3 chapters just all about them filming and include their personal thoughts about one another (like: Sean and Mark are laughing hysterically when Sean thinks to himself- Wow, Mark has such a beautiful smile. If only I could hear his thoughts and see how he feels about me. We have such an amazing friendship but I wouldn't want to make him uncomfortable by telling him the truth....)
C.By now you should be starting chapter 4-5 After they complete the first set of videos for their series, maybe Mark and Sean decide that before they begin to edit them that they are just gonna sit,relax, and catch up on things that had been going on in each others lives over the past 6 months or so.... (Give the story some body and time to slowly build up anticipation)....
D. Middle- By now you have built up some anticipation and have been reading thier inner thoughts about one another, at this point you are probably on chapter 6. Here is where its time to add a conflict of some sort which causes the two of them to say something or maybe act on a feeling because either Mark or Sean mis-read certain signals,or mis-interpereted the direction their evening was going. EXAMPLE: After dinner, Mark got up from the sofa to begin clearing away the contents from the table in front of them. Sean then reaches out and grabs Mark's big strong muscular arm sending chills through Mark's body and giving him goose bumps. Suddenly, Mark began thinking about Sean touching his body in other places. Sean began to speak and for a moment all Mark could hear was his heart beating faster and faster and the sound of his blood coursing through him. This startled Mark and then he could hear Sean saying: this is my place, you dont need to worry about cleaning all of this up. Please sit back down and relax while I take care of it. What kind of host would I be if I had you cleaning up after us? Sean then flashed a smile at Mark who was starting to blush,(not only because of how sweet and thoughtful Sean was, but also because of the feelings that he was experiencing in that moment). As Mark sat back down Sean began clearing things up from in front him. All of a sudden, out of the corner of his eye he caught a glance of exactly the thing Mark was feeling for him in that moment. 

I could continue to elaborate for hours im sure, about what you could do to improve your story.....  The reason behind Fan-Fics is for the reader to be able to imagine their favorite characters doing things with one another that normally wouldnt happen and so they can play out their dirty little fantasies in their minds.... For stories like this, there needs to be a lot of in-depth descriptions. The words should paint a clear picture in the readers minds of exactly what is happening and should make it so that your audience can vividly imagine the characters as if they were secretly watching this all happen from a hidden camera or through a tiny un-noticeable peep hole....
Make sense? Sorry

This is the best story yet so sad and breathtaking just please make a comic of it I can't picture any of this in my mind, its great reading it. 

I love this book!!! it's so good! I love septiplier so much and I'm new to this community so when I found this story, I was really excited to see others with the same likings I have

I really love it! I love how you show how they really care about each other and how it builds up...I like how seàn is a really caring person irl and it’s show in the book same for mark...I really can’t wait to read the next chapters 