The romance is great.
It tickles my crazy romantic-drama side.
Its a really good story. The author did a good work.
And I love how some parts make me laugh. Its actually not easy nowadays to find authors who have a good sense of humor and are able to incorporate that to their novels.
6 years ago
1
DragonTreasures
Hey, I liked the dialog and plot you have written. However, I feel like you need to supply more background for the characters via explanations so I can see the world better.
The best things about the novel were all covered up by the grammatical problems, though, so I would suggest Grammarly, or reading your work out loud to see if it makes sense.
Overall, keep improving, and find inspiration in your favorite novels!
Other than the grammar, the story flowed well, so I look forward to you continuing and improving as you go.
6 years ago
1
Sapphirechelsea237
The plot is definitely interesting and conversations are good too!!! I would love to read the next chapters!!!
The only mistakes I found, were in punctuation and Grammar. They are not many and not too much noticeable. But if they are removed, then it would be pretty good!!! Keep writing!!! :D
The romance is great. It tickles my crazy romantic-drama side. Its a really good story. The author did a good work. And I love how some parts make me laugh. Its actually not easy nowadays to find authors who have a good sense of humor and are able to incorporate that to their novels.
Hey, I liked the dialog and plot you have written. However, I feel like you need to supply more background for the characters via explanations so I can see the world better. The best things about the novel were all covered up by the grammatical problems, though, so I would suggest Grammarly, or reading your work out loud to see if it makes sense. Overall, keep improving, and find inspiration in your favorite novels! Other than the grammar, the story flowed well, so I look forward to you continuing and improving as you go.
The plot is definitely interesting and conversations are good too!!! I would love to read the next chapters!!! The only mistakes I found, were in punctuation and Grammar. They are not many and not too much noticeable. But if they are removed, then it would be pretty good!!! Keep writing!!! :D