There I was, standing on the bright line where the dark street ended. People stared at me from the darkness. Their eyes black as the night. They stood on the dark street. As I was standing some feet away from them in the afternoon sun for a second or two, I ran away with my full potential. When suddenly a dog started barking at me. He was coming to bite me, pushing me towards the dark street where all those people were standing, and just when I was two inches away from those people...
Feel free to rate and review. Thank you! Had to do this to promote it๐๐๐๐๐๐ Anyway this is my first novel so there might be some mistakes but although the story is an original work of me. However it'll be kind of you if you will tell me my mistake in the comments so that I could come over it.
The novel has been great so far after the grammatical errors are fixed. The storytelling has been abazing since it gives of sort of a cosmic horror vibe where the mc faces something inevitable and tries to fight it.
The writing is decent with your usual grammar error and stuff. The biggest advantage this novel has is the scary part of it. My only complaint will be about the chp is too short.........................
Besides some awkward sentences this story was really interesting! I love the take on this horror story. Keep up the work! The only thing this novel really needs is . . . MORE
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Dude at least write more chapters than these. I love to see it going. Want morr to read but you don't update.๐๐๐ Please add more chapters and do a mass release.
An interesting take in the horror and thriller genre, this novel made me view the genre in a different light. I will be waiting for further updates! Also as another author I would like to suggest you to strongly convey the environment and internal thought process of the MC as well since a better link can be established with the reader-kuns! I will be supporting this novel and I have loved the current progress it has taken!
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Wow I really loved this novel. The plot is very scary. I want you to update with more chapters please do a mass release I am very excited about this book.
I am only in the first chapter but I will still review it. So, the story thus far is interesting as the plot progresses as your storytelling gets people intrigued, but the grammar breaks the moments, unquestionably focus on your writing as it may cause the readers to lose interest quite fast. Tip - there is something called 'showing, not telling', you don't tell your readers, you 'show' them. Example, you don't write, "He is angry," you 'show' them, by "He gritted his teeth," the readers will 'feel' the emotions of the characters by reading through, just saying "he is angry," doesn't excite anyone, but a pretty good novel. Pretty short for my normal reviews. Be optimistic, that's what a Novelist strive for.
This is a review of the first four chapters. In this story, the main character takes a detour on the way home from school and ends up in a supernatural world. He then desperately tries to escape from this supernatural world, but he keeps being pulled back. The plot is scary, but the numerous run-on sentences and other grammatical mistakes dull the shock.