I am in one piece

I am in one piece

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Author: Iam_D_king7839
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InnerVoice
InnerVoice

I love your idea of adding natsu into one piece but that’s all. Your grammar is atrocious, your plot is all over the place, there’s no detail to your story, everything is rushed and you are basically just giving him techniques and abilities while using time skip as an excuse. THIS NOVEL IS SHIT. For example, where did ace come from? How did he know where to find the fire fruit? How did he instantly able to make techniques when he just got the ability? How did natsu (reincarnated otaku) learn all those Haki when he doesn’t even know the training method? It is impossible to train in conqueror Haki cause one is simply born with it yet he could train it? Bull****!!! On an island full of magma, how did he survive with no food or water? You might say he can eat fire, yes it is true but it doesn’t replace hunger. Fire is but a mean to recover his stamina. And what is food without water? Humans can’t survive Even 7 days without water yet natsu can on a island full of lava for 3 years? BULL!!!!!! SHIT!!!!! AUTHOR YOU ARE TOO FULL OF SHIT. Okay, my rant is over.

5 years ago
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VEYN
VEYN

обновления?.................................................................................................................................

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