An old man who died of old age, his spirit was transferred to another world and he became a ghost dungeon master in another world, and the first thing he saw haughty little girl, asking him to do things.
Thoroughly mediocre, and sub-par in some categories.
Easy read, not a complicated story, turn brains off for plot holes, turn brains on for grammar.
Let's start with the story. So far, there isn't much, but that is to be expected. The thing that drives me insane is the brokenness of the gacha. It's just a way to give the MC the stuff he needs. It's always rare, great, epic or needed. Herbs won't grow in the dungeon? don't worry, the next gacha will fix that. Want to start smithing? The gacha giveth. Unlimited materials? The gacha has your back. MC should make a shrine to the gacha and the dungeon core. Sorry, but I really hate some kind of plot device that constantly gives the MC whatever he needs at the moment for virtually no cost or effort.
Speaking of the dungeon core, she is a non-character. No personality except exceptionally timid. You don't see, hear or notice her at all until she is required to pass on a message or as comic relief. Same for Kuro. The bandits need a course in Banditry 101. The most interesting quirky one was a passing adventurer. The MC dungeon master, Mr Ghost, hasn't shown much personality either except 'grandfatherly' towards a young boy. The boy's guards should be executed for being too stupid too. Mr Ghost will manage all skills. He will smith, do alchemy, fight with sword, spear, bow and magic and basically be everything this story needs and do everything that needs doing.... Right.
There is no info on what a dungeon is or does, no feeling for their place in the world. Either it's something that will come up later, or it is assumed you have read similar novels before. So far, no world building.
It was updating regularly until january.
Finally, the writing. It's average for not very good non-native English. The sentences mostly make sense with no bad idiom, but the tenses are hopelessly mixed up. Even worse if the verb is also a noun, like a a walk / to walk. It appears the spell check the author is using is hopeless at that.
This is definitely one of the better dungeon novels.
It has a nice story so far. And the most important thing is that it definitely will last for sometime as long as the writer doesn't drop it.
what a nice beginning I hope you can continue...............................................................................................
5 years ago
1
BigNovelBigDream
This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
3 years ago
0
Async0929
Hey there!
Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact
rebecca.review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample charpters or links will be appriciated when reaching out.
4 years ago
0
NumbLove
Is this dead?
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5 years ago
0
Kurotora
This a short but great read. The MC is pretty versatile and smart. The only downside is that the story has stopped. Please start writing it again I love this story!!
5 years ago
0
Henry_Lake
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Thoroughly mediocre, and sub-par in some categories. Easy read, not a complicated story, turn brains off for plot holes, turn brains on for grammar. Let's start with the story. So far, there isn't much, but that is to be expected. The thing that drives me insane is the brokenness of the gacha. It's just a way to give the MC the stuff he needs. It's always rare, great, epic or needed. Herbs won't grow in the dungeon? don't worry, the next gacha will fix that. Want to start smithing? The gacha giveth. Unlimited materials? The gacha has your back. MC should make a shrine to the gacha and the dungeon core. Sorry, but I really hate some kind of plot device that constantly gives the MC whatever he needs at the moment for virtually no cost or effort. Speaking of the dungeon core, she is a non-character. No personality except exceptionally timid. You don't see, hear or notice her at all until she is required to pass on a message or as comic relief. Same for Kuro. The bandits need a course in Banditry 101. The most interesting quirky one was a passing adventurer. The MC dungeon master, Mr Ghost, hasn't shown much personality either except 'grandfatherly' towards a young boy. The boy's guards should be executed for being too stupid too. Mr Ghost will manage all skills. He will smith, do alchemy, fight with sword, spear, bow and magic and basically be everything this story needs and do everything that needs doing.... Right. There is no info on what a dungeon is or does, no feeling for their place in the world. Either it's something that will come up later, or it is assumed you have read similar novels before. So far, no world building. It was updating regularly until january. Finally, the writing. It's average for not very good non-native English. The sentences mostly make sense with no bad idiom, but the tenses are hopelessly mixed up. Even worse if the verb is also a noun, like a a walk / to walk. It appears the spell check the author is using is hopeless at that.
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This is a good take on a dark/ghost/spirit dungeon novel. I like it because it takes a nice take on necromancy as well the core is kind to everyone.
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This is definitely one of the better dungeon novels. It has a nice story so far. And the most important thing is that it definitely will last for sometime as long as the writer doesn't drop it.
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what a nice beginning I hope you can continue...............................................................................................
This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact rebecca.review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample charpters or links will be appriciated when reaching out.
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This a short but great read. The MC is pretty versatile and smart. The only downside is that the story has stopped. Please start writing it again I love this story!!
Please Post More (: the novel that you wrote is one of the best that I have ever read online. So keep going, talent shouldn't just vanish. As for the viewers be sure to read this novel.
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