Writing activity is tested. My first one wasn't very good so I'm trying to improve.
My problem is that now I may be taking too much time to describe things and repeating myself a bit. It's just that when I'm writing, I imagine the scene drawn in manga so I detail it as much as I can.
I'm not a person with great creativity and inspiration either, so please be indulgent and criticize intelligently. Thank you for reading.
4 years ago
54
Littlecute23
I really like this fanfic, the quality of writing and character development is very well laid out and most importantly a very good personality of mc. honestly I'm bored with MCs who are cold, villainous, very perverted, and moreover the type doesn't care about around or behave "I'm not a hero who helps everyone", hey dude what's wrong with helping others? yeah this is just my opinion haha lol. This fanfic is suitable for people who want to relax themselves from cold MCs or villain MCs let alone super pervert. Peace
4 years ago
21
entropie
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4 years ago
16
Spelloyal
Everthing has a limit. This novel have a good plot, but i am at chapter 10 and nothing happened at all! ten chapters only of prologue and dumping of information. I can not take it anymore!
Sorry but for now I am abandoning this novel, maybe I will try again in a few days because I am really interested in the plot, but if this dump of information continues I will end up dropping it permanently.
I decided to write a review mainly because this novel didnt have one. The story is great, has good world background, and updates relatively frequently. So far, I’m loving the plotline and idea of the story, very unique. Only real problem is that one chapter isn’t in English but I’m assuming it was just describing the world cause i skipped it and it was fine. Real good read even if you start now, when there is only seven chapters.
4 years ago
5
Ai_Evangeline
If you want to get bored and make you sleepy read this, so that the one-step OC passes 2 chapters, BORING ....... VERY BORING..................
4 years ago
4
Thissmithy_Manga
nothing happens read near 20 chaps and still on a mountain, like christ why I honestly don't understand i can't read anymore because nothing happens every chap, he buys sword mastery or somthing one chap then debates for the rest of it on which sword to buy while constantly talking with his system in circles.
4 years ago
3
yokedjaguar
The character creation is the cliche wemon drool men envy, and the mc didn't do anything for 15 chapters except blow up a forest, the grammar is alright, better than most on wn but not amazing.
4 years ago
3
Yuri_yuri
I would like the mc to be more in its phoenix form because that's the point of having a non-human mc ......
also his immortality and regeneration how is it ??? like the immortality of ban or like the intangence of ace (one piece) ???
Because a phoenix is made of fire, so if in any fight it would be impossible to physically harm it since its physical form is fire ...
4 years ago
3
Unwept_Writer
i love how you are writing the characters and the writing itself is a great thing. i love the interactions with the other characters and animals
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Writing activity is tested. My first one wasn't very good so I'm trying to improve. My problem is that now I may be taking too much time to describe things and repeating myself a bit. It's just that when I'm writing, I imagine the scene drawn in manga so I detail it as much as I can. I'm not a person with great creativity and inspiration either, so please be indulgent and criticize intelligently. Thank you for reading.
I really like this fanfic, the quality of writing and character development is very well laid out and most importantly a very good personality of mc. honestly I'm bored with MCs who are cold, villainous, very perverted, and moreover the type doesn't care about around or behave "I'm not a hero who helps everyone", hey dude what's wrong with helping others? yeah this is just my opinion haha lol. This fanfic is suitable for people who want to relax themselves from cold MCs or villain MCs let alone super pervert. Peace
Reveal Spoiler
Everthing has a limit. This novel have a good plot, but i am at chapter 10 and nothing happened at all! ten chapters only of prologue and dumping of information. I can not take it anymore! Sorry but for now I am abandoning this novel, maybe I will try again in a few days because I am really interested in the plot, but if this dump of information continues I will end up dropping it permanently.
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I decided to write a review mainly because this novel didnt have one. The story is great, has good world background, and updates relatively frequently. So far, I’m loving the plotline and idea of the story, very unique. Only real problem is that one chapter isn’t in English but I’m assuming it was just describing the world cause i skipped it and it was fine. Real good read even if you start now, when there is only seven chapters.
If you want to get bored and make you sleepy read this, so that the one-step OC passes 2 chapters, BORING ....... VERY BORING..................
nothing happens read near 20 chaps and still on a mountain, like christ why I honestly don't understand i can't read anymore because nothing happens every chap, he buys sword mastery or somthing one chap then debates for the rest of it on which sword to buy while constantly talking with his system in circles.
The character creation is the cliche wemon drool men envy, and the mc didn't do anything for 15 chapters except blow up a forest, the grammar is alright, better than most on wn but not amazing.
I would like the mc to be more in its phoenix form because that's the point of having a non-human mc ...... also his immortality and regeneration how is it ??? like the immortality of ban or like the intangence of ace (one piece) ??? Because a phoenix is made of fire, so if in any fight it would be impossible to physically harm it since its physical form is fire ...
i love how you are writing the characters and the writing itself is a great thing. i love the interactions with the other characters and animals
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