This is my first time ever trying to write stories. So if you find many mistakes or it didn't suited your taste i can only say sorry. English is not my first language so you will find many mistakes later. Also i wrote all this on my phone. Hope you will understand. Thanks...
4 years ago
1
amaturewriter
The power is dope, so is the idea. as for the story. theres barely anything here. The timeline is during luffys journey. MC gets stronger and stronger without any real purpose or goal. like he becomes a god without doing anything, dude literally took on the marines, akainu, sengoku, etc . Plus theres no ' journey ' here. dude just steals shit.
C11 made me drop. MC just goes to the marines, attacks em...rapes hina for no reason and then gets a bounty the next day. theres no story here. no purpose here. nothing.
4 years ago
4
golden_fuser
also this you just got my respect for them 5 stars because of that defense now all you need is strength hhahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha
4 years ago
4
Dido_Oscar
i want mooore
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4 years ago
2
Madeka_Box
and this is just the prologue [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]👍🏿
4 years ago
1
Yuuki123
the power is so terrible he can steal anything without any restrictions and that without curse of normal devil fruit. and the whole story is about a man who steal anything to become strong and become Im personal dog so he and im can get out from there and that one-piece universe is just a farm for evil cultivator!!! yes cultivator for duck sake. and after he get out from there he can't keep his power so what the purpose he is sent there? don't forget the one who sent him is angel
hate rape.
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Pathetic. At first it was good but then later rape and rape. shit mc. Pathetic mc. What the FUCK is that? Idk why anyone cant keep good work? and make it shit.
This is my first time ever trying to write stories. So if you find many mistakes or it didn't suited your taste i can only say sorry. English is not my first language so you will find many mistakes later. Also i wrote all this on my phone. Hope you will understand. Thanks...
The power is dope, so is the idea. as for the story. theres barely anything here. The timeline is during luffys journey. MC gets stronger and stronger without any real purpose or goal. like he becomes a god without doing anything, dude literally took on the marines, akainu, sengoku, etc . Plus theres no ' journey ' here. dude just steals shit. C11 made me drop. MC just goes to the marines, attacks em...rapes hina for no reason and then gets a bounty the next day. theres no story here. no purpose here. nothing.
also this you just got my respect for them 5 stars because of that defense now all you need is strength hhahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha
i want mooore +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
and this is just the prologue [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]👍🏿
the power is so terrible he can steal anything without any restrictions and that without curse of normal devil fruit. and the whole story is about a man who steal anything to become strong and become Im personal dog so he and im can get out from there and that one-piece universe is just a farm for evil cultivator!!! yes cultivator for duck sake. and after he get out from there he can't keep his power so what the purpose he is sent there? don't forget the one who sent him is angel
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hate rape. ................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
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Pathetic. At first it was good but then later rape and rape. shit mc. Pathetic mc. What the FUCK is that? Idk why anyone cant keep good work? and make it shit.
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