Olivia Milan - A Bad Girl Story

The first chapter lays out an interesting character. And the pacing is alright. I think the author could write her characters' description into the story instead of outright telling the reader. I like the foreshadow of the drama that'll rise up later in the second chapter when they're deciding schools. All in all, a great story that I can see going far. Please keep up the writing.

I like how the character's traits are instantly developed, but I feel like that worked as a double-edged sword too. While pushing her arrogance to the extreme opens ton of room for character development throughout the story, it made it hard to read at the start because of how toxic her whole vibe was, at least in my opinion. Good work though, keep it up!

It certainly gets your interest from the get go. what I enjoy most about the character is that, despite the extremity of her flaws, she just accepts them and rolls with it. Nice job, author!

the story and plot are amazing, I like the way how the story flows and how it explains the parts but few things were spoiling the story like - punctuation marks were breaking few moments, the continuous use of a word in a single sentence (ex-i and she) that what I could point out if you fix these issues you'll rock it, good luck author you're doing awesome!

Haha so far liking the MC’s character (Is it bad that I relate? XD) Story does have potential. Looking forward to seeing how this will develop

I'm having a hard time understanding what's going on because of the grammar and stuff. The flow of the story is still good and fast-paced though, so that's the good point. First time reading a female POV novel, so let's go and embark on a new journey.

I find the main character really entertaining. Same goes with the dialogues. The descriptive part needs more though, but over all its a good read. Good luck for the rest of the story

The story is fast paced and very interested.. I'm hooked from the moment I knew it's a narration from a bad girl MC POV 🤩 The MC is so strong and brave, I lovvve her 💗 and the narration is super cool and funny... hope everyone can give this story a try !! Cheers!

God this character!! can't relate more XD I mean wow! the way It is described is amazing. The introduction can look a bit lengthy but wait till you dive into the story!!!

This is just a first chapter and I can see that she is still a firm bad girl even if she grows up, in a good way of course. I would like to see more of this progress you made!

What a good start for a novel. A novel which is focused to a bad girl since her childhood. You had a cool FMC plus she's a beauty. Good luck and keep on writing!

CH 10 - The story is very well written and the characters are very life-like, sometimes I even put my self in the MC shoes. t And beware, there is a good turn in the story by chapter 10. (but i can say here, shhhhh, cant spolier ) Keep up the good work author!!!