This novel has to be redo im sorry it has been given very bad review such as a lot of grammatical reviews so i have to redo it sorry!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
4 years ago
7
jenos_showerheads
i read the first couple of chapters and i'm honestly really hooked on the world building. the way you listed all the specs like stamina, health, etc. was v cool because you don't see that often in novels and that tibit made it feel like an actual game
4 years ago
2
Scollins_Singh
Keep up challenging your talent everyone and happy halloween stay safe wear a mask everyway you go it winter and the statics of covid 19 are going up all over the globe so stay safe and wish god all the best and make this treat go away and support this author thank you.
4 years ago
5
CoolForniteplayer
FINALLY 100 CHAPTERS GOOD LUCK READING THAT WAS THE LAST BUT NEXT VOLUME I WILL CONTINUE WRITING MORE CHAPTERS GOOD LUCK READING GUYS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
4 years ago
3
CoolForniteplayer
@instagram Nathanisontheway4
I gave Focus a 5/5 in everything but writing quality. It isn't that I make any major errors, but it seems like I can never re-read through a chapter I've uploaded without wanting to pull my hair out because I made a typo here, or spelt something wrong there. But! if you can forgive an author for constantly spelling dao, doa, I'm sure Focus will be something you enjoy for a long time to come!
Aside from my mistakes, Focus has a lot of strengths. I believe the world and lore are all very interesting. There are countless clans and sects, and each has a unique history with each other that pushes the story forward. In terms of character development, Chen rui straight forward as you can get, but it's clear he himself . I also try to give every important character a unique backstory of note that explains their motivations and personality.
For stability of uploads, that's something you never have to worry about :) I've been uploading at least 2 chapters a day for the better part of a month now, and the only times I uploaded a single chapter was back when I didn't split my 4000 word chapters in multiple parts. You'll have something to come back to enjoy everyday :)
As for the story itself, the second volume will speak for itself. The first was an introductory arc, where we introduce the mc, who he is, his back story, and his first female companion. The second, however, truly delves into the lore of the Focus verse. We have mystery, backstabbing, and plenty of face slapping.
I hope you'll all enjoy Focus as much as I enjoy writing it everyday! :)
4 years ago
3
CoolForniteplayer
Hey, Author here. I’m really happy to see such good comments about my book, and I hope it continues into the future as well. But that’s not what I wrote this review for...
If someone rates the book at 3-4 stars, I sincerely believe that there was an issue with the book. After all, I can’t notice everything wrong, so I will check to see if there can be any improvements. Additionally, I hope that people who give 3-4 stars will specify what problems they see. Also, I would love to have those people to come back and read the altered novel again before finally deciding how they feel.
Last of all though, to all readers and writers alike, thank you for taking the time to read it. Have fun !
4 years ago
3
Faysal_Ahmed_5058
I am a new reader of this npvelso I saw the synopsis and read some reviews here. Then i gave it a try. Its really good with the world building and character formation. A lot of words in a chapter too. I enjoyed it very much. But I want more action and drama here
4 years ago
2
Anotoki
It was enjoyable even though there are some grammatical issues here and there but it was no biggie.
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4 years ago
2
Hanna_Chow
wOW MORE CHapters are out yes i was waiting for this whole week and finally 80 chapters on the dot i can't believe my eyes insane This author only created this book couple weeks ago and look at it now views chapters wow incredibly insane that i can't believe excellent job author i have to say that you are incredible that you made these chapters so fast you are like a super fast typing machine good luck continuing at your success.
4 years ago
2
Hanna_Chow
Great book, great writing and superb character development. The journey we experience along with the MC from the baby arc in the beginning through the academy arc. The book stays consistent with writing and develops the world beautifully. We experience the MC gradually develop into what is considered a healthy and fulfilled person while also searching for meaning to his existence. 5 stars all day long
4 years ago
2
CoolForniteplayer
Author supporting his own work. This is a story that will be updated daily with chapters.
An action Weak to strong story as the character Evolves completing tasks that only chen rui and otaku would do.
4 years ago
2
Nattychris_22
Okay, I'm hooked with the synopsis. I can get that you've already have a great world background. It's a potential great shounen storyline, with lots of adventures. My only suggestions is about the description part, I find it difficult to understand, that some parts may be a bit confusing. I'll suggest the author to have some re-read or proofreading to make improvements.
P.S. I would keep on reading, if I find something, I'll comment so you'll make improvements.
Keep it up!!!
4 years ago
2
Hanna_Chow
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Great job author continue posting chapter i have reading these chapter what you posted from yesterday almost whole night but great hope you post more.
4 years ago
2
CoolForniteplayer
ELeven new chapters has came out today hope you enjoy them spend a lot of time last night to write down and publish harder than you thing anyway have a good day.
4 years ago
2
Septic_Red
Good book and good selection of characters. I am not a big fan of the systems novels but this... seems intriguing to me for some reasons... Keep up the work, Author!
This novel has to be redo im sorry it has been given very bad review such as a lot of grammatical reviews so i have to redo it sorry!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
i read the first couple of chapters and i'm honestly really hooked on the world building. the way you listed all the specs like stamina, health, etc. was v cool because you don't see that often in novels and that tibit made it feel like an actual game
Keep up challenging your talent everyone and happy halloween stay safe wear a mask everyway you go it winter and the statics of covid 19 are going up all over the globe so stay safe and wish god all the best and make this treat go away and support this author thank you.
FINALLY 100 CHAPTERS GOOD LUCK READING THAT WAS THE LAST BUT NEXT VOLUME I WILL CONTINUE WRITING MORE CHAPTERS GOOD LUCK READING GUYS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
@instagram Nathanisontheway4 I gave Focus a 5/5 in everything but writing quality. It isn't that I make any major errors, but it seems like I can never re-read through a chapter I've uploaded without wanting to pull my hair out because I made a typo here, or spelt something wrong there. But! if you can forgive an author for constantly spelling dao, doa, I'm sure Focus will be something you enjoy for a long time to come! Aside from my mistakes, Focus has a lot of strengths. I believe the world and lore are all very interesting. There are countless clans and sects, and each has a unique history with each other that pushes the story forward. In terms of character development, Chen rui straight forward as you can get, but it's clear he himself . I also try to give every important character a unique backstory of note that explains their motivations and personality. For stability of uploads, that's something you never have to worry about :) I've been uploading at least 2 chapters a day for the better part of a month now, and the only times I uploaded a single chapter was back when I didn't split my 4000 word chapters in multiple parts. You'll have something to come back to enjoy everyday :) As for the story itself, the second volume will speak for itself. The first was an introductory arc, where we introduce the mc, who he is, his back story, and his first female companion. The second, however, truly delves into the lore of the Focus verse. We have mystery, backstabbing, and plenty of face slapping. I hope you'll all enjoy Focus as much as I enjoy writing it everyday! :)
Hey, Author here. I’m really happy to see such good comments about my book, and I hope it continues into the future as well. But that’s not what I wrote this review for... If someone rates the book at 3-4 stars, I sincerely believe that there was an issue with the book. After all, I can’t notice everything wrong, so I will check to see if there can be any improvements. Additionally, I hope that people who give 3-4 stars will specify what problems they see. Also, I would love to have those people to come back and read the altered novel again before finally deciding how they feel. Last of all though, to all readers and writers alike, thank you for taking the time to read it. Have fun !
I am a new reader of this npvelso I saw the synopsis and read some reviews here. Then i gave it a try. Its really good with the world building and character formation. A lot of words in a chapter too. I enjoyed it very much. But I want more action and drama here
It was enjoyable even though there are some grammatical issues here and there but it was no biggie. [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
wOW MORE CHapters are out yes i was waiting for this whole week and finally 80 chapters on the dot i can't believe my eyes insane This author only created this book couple weeks ago and look at it now views chapters wow incredibly insane that i can't believe excellent job author i have to say that you are incredible that you made these chapters so fast you are like a super fast typing machine good luck continuing at your success.
Great book, great writing and superb character development. The journey we experience along with the MC from the baby arc in the beginning through the academy arc. The book stays consistent with writing and develops the world beautifully. We experience the MC gradually develop into what is considered a healthy and fulfilled person while also searching for meaning to his existence. 5 stars all day long
Author supporting his own work. This is a story that will be updated daily with chapters. An action Weak to strong story as the character Evolves completing tasks that only chen rui and otaku would do.
Okay, I'm hooked with the synopsis. I can get that you've already have a great world background. It's a potential great shounen storyline, with lots of adventures. My only suggestions is about the description part, I find it difficult to understand, that some parts may be a bit confusing. I'll suggest the author to have some re-read or proofreading to make improvements. P.S. I would keep on reading, if I find something, I'll comment so you'll make improvements. Keep it up!!!
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ELeven new chapters has came out today hope you enjoy them spend a lot of time last night to write down and publish harder than you thing anyway have a good day.
Good book and good selection of characters. I am not a big fan of the systems novels but this... seems intriguing to me for some reasons... Keep up the work, Author!