An illusion

To be honest I really enjoyed this story even though it's length was quite disappointing. Uju as a main character was someone I could understand with ease as you fleshed her out properly. Unfortunately I can't say the same for the other characters. Due to the short length of the story, there's not enough time to actually understand the other characters or feel something for them and it was quite unfortunate. To be honest I feel that this story would have been a lot better than it is now if it had gone on for a little while longer .i wasn't able to enjoy the mystery and thrill in the story but to how far it went by. The whole reveal about about Irikefe being the reason the villain in the story didn't have as much impact as it was supposed to due to the fact that I don't know him so well to actually be surprised that he is a bad guy . Anyways apart from the story length which left a lot lacking in the story ,I enjoyed the grammar as it had very few errors and character interactions was actually enjoyable.

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I love the personal feel of this story. Its not often you find someone so conflicted, to the point where it can carry the story. But the writer in this instance does it, and does it well. That, combined with the very few mistakes that may be found makes this an excellent overall great read. All i can say up to this point is to keep it up!

I know it's selfish but I urge you. Please, please, please. Lengthen the story. The first chapter got me hooked alright. You describe your FL really well. And the story plot. It reminded me of "The Guardian" or "Safe haven" by Nicholas Sparks. With the two-faced personality, hiding nasty character beneath the kind and mature facade, seriously it's awesome. And the mystery, the thrill, you laid it all so well. And as the story goes on, you heighten the tension. But in the last chapter, you dropped the bomb too soon. You left you're readers hanging like, wait, that's it? If it's not too much to ask, I urge you to lengthen it. The plot was totally awesome! And ending it just like that won't do your captivating plot any justice.

The book was nice, but was too short. The characters were intriguing and the story was mysterious enough to keep you going. Maybe you could expound on the plots and scenes to make it more interesting. Keep writing.

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he story has an intriguing beginning, starting with showing every aspect of the protagonist quickly bringing us into context. The narration and description is good, especially to understand what is happening and what the protagonist sees. The statistics are well explained giving a good playing environment. It also has a certain mystery that prompts you to continue reading to discover what happens and who is responsible for the events.

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The story was short and was completed. It was a roller coaster ride of emotions as I have read it. The fluency of the writer in English was splendid as far as I have read. Mysterious enough to get you hooked! All I can say was make the story a bit of thirty to forty chapters long to make it at least more engaging. It was the length of other short stories that were made into a movie. So all in all, a great job well done!

The picking of the genre is good, stories like this popular among youths. The writing style is alright, even though there are minor grammatical errors it's still good for it is simple and understandable! Good luck with your story!