Katsumi Nakajima, an otaku that has the lowest reputation in school. Despised by most of the students in his class, but a newly transferred student from the USA, a girl, decides to befriend him, there was more to what he was known at school, he wasn't the person who the school pictured him to be. Read as Katsumi Nakajima, an otaku, decides to finally start a new life in his school.

Starting Life Once Again

ROMANCE

COMEDY

CAMPUS

LIGHTNOVEL

The story is good so far! I like how you vividly narrated the story and the development was nice and steady. I love the plotline and it was an enjoyable read! Keep it going until you reach a million views and you will find it pleasing to the eyes. Characters are showed well with various emotions and I can't help but be attached to them. Kudos and your reader here. Peace ✌️

While this is only the first chapter, the characters themselves definitely showcase different emotions through the heavy dialogue and interactions. 

However, I think there could be some improvements made here:

1. Grammar: To name a few— there were missing commas, resulting in run-on sentences, which I couldn’t recorrect since the paragraphs were lengthy; some quoted words didn’t have a proper ending punctuation like a period, comma, question mark, etc. 

And aside from grammatical errors, I found the novel to be difficult to visualize since the characters weren’t described as much as I had hoped. Most of the time, I was thinking of blank people to imagine their interactions, which made me struggle to immerse myself.

2. Show not tell: As you mentioned earlier, I can understand Japanese-style is dialogue heavy, yet I do suggest inputting more emotions on their face rather than them expressing it all the time. Or if you don’t want to do this, then I would advise more surrounding details, so I could get an overall view of the world the mc lives in.

3. Spacing: Especially since this is mainly dialogue, I strongly suggest separating different speakers into different paragraphs. It doesn’t have to be every single time to switch, but it would make it easier for the readers as well as me. And this is when you could put in other details of their surroundings to flesh it out more.

4. Selling point: Like every book, there must be something extremely unique about the novel that the reader should remember when they hear the name, whether it be the plot or the characters. Unfortunately, I find it hard to determine what exactly strikes me the most intrigued, leaving me nearly nowhere to place an emphasis on. 

However this is merely my opinion and should not influence the storyline in any way. So don’t take this part negatively. :3

Overall, it’s still enjoyable to read, so keep up the good work, Author !

A great start. I enjoy the characters so far. Description and dialogues are fun and interesting. Only thing I would recommend is to split large paragraphs and dialogues to a separate sentence.
Overall, great job Author!

The story is very cute, and the writing itself is good- engaging and detailed in all the right places. I like the humour and lightheartedness of it, and the plot has a nice flow to it, so you get time to learn about the characters too.
Very nice from what I have read so far,
keep it up

It is a good start of the story, but I do have some things to say about the writing. The dialogue is absolutely fine, given the fact that it's written Japanese-style, but you should try to avoid repeating the word "said" after every dialogue. Try to find some replacements for "he said/she said" or develop a bit more the idea, because the repetition can be distracting. I would also like to have more insight into the protagonist's mind and his feelings. Good job though! Keep it up!

Hello, it's the author. I may have been inactive because I just ran out of ideas and hit writer's block. So I decided to do another fresh start with a finally planned out story. My schedule might be slow but it's for better writing quality. So things to note on:

1. I will write in Japanese-style, meaning there will be a lot of dialogue between the characters.

2. My updates might be really slow so again, I apologize.

and that's it. Hope you guys stick with me until the end.