I am picking this back up. But my release rate will be slow. After all, I feel like people will read this if I write well. And I will go for actual chapters, eg 5000 words plus.
Shameless Author here: I would like to thank all of you for reading my fan fic. It just motivates me that so many people would read my fic. And if you have any suggestions please dont be afraid to ask me.
4 years ago
10
IEASIEAS
It is great idea and it could be a great story but shift this from 'novel' section to
'fanfic' section .. aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
4 years ago
8
Dark_B3rry
I don't know why, but mc just irritates so much ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
4 years ago
4
Cerisu
Cerita yang Bagus , penulisannya Lumayan , Memiliki Alur Yang Bagus , Dan Penjelasan Tentang Chakra Dan Jutsu Serta Pelatihan Tubuh Bagus , Benar² Konsep yang Bagus , Aku Harap Kedepannya Akan Ada Lagi lebih banyak Konsep dan penjelasan Jutsu Dan Pelatihan Lagi , bukan Hanya omong kosong seperti Fanfic lain oooo**
4 years ago
3
RandomSwordsThief
The reincarnation story is not as realistic as the title suggests, but for a green writer, it isn't bad. I love the new Dojutsu, but I find it completely unnecessary when he already has Mokuton. The baby should have been traveling with Tsunade and Shizune after the death of his parents. Backstory I made up: some Senju parents (Tsunade's cousin is the father) leave the village to live safely away from the shinobi life and death. The mother gets assassinated during her pregnancy after the sudden death of her husband. In this story, the being saves the child by having Tsunade walk by and reincarnates you instead of the baby that should not have existed. The mother still dies because this is her fate one way or another. I mean, this is important for the creation of a relevant main character. I believe that the writer would have had an easier time with the story if he added only the Dojutsu to the mc. No need for a headache to sort the backstory, if you know what I mean.
4 years ago
2
Apurba_Sharma
A great fanfic. It's very hard to find good fanfic and good writing style. But, author is one of the rare kind. He is already jonin level writer. Hopefully we will see a lot of chapters on this story.
its good more chapters please more chapters pleasemore chapters pleasemore chapters pleasemore chapters pleasemore chapters pleasemore chapters please
4 years ago
1
ChangedReviewer
Can't even spell the word "semi" correctly.
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6 months ago
0
ChangedReviewer
Can't write the word "semi" properly... decides to write a story...
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a year ago
0
Sweetmaker
Love the realistic approach to storytelling and the unique direction it heading!!! Even just looking at mc and mother relationship is awesome.
4 years ago
0
Str4ng3r
Great story, but one thing bothers me a lot. That is, the main character's kokugan. Don't you think 20 x speed is a bit too much? I mean there is literally no genkai that can ever hope to match it if MC can just blitz everything when he gets strong enough. Please nerf it, or add some backlash. I mean MC just goes 30 times faster than his original speed and just drains his chakra. If MC is as fast as Naruto in Boruto, then he can easily one shot every opponent so far. Just feels extremely unrealistic for a bloodline to be this op. Not to mention, if someone had the bloodline before him, then how is it still unknown?
4 years ago
0
Kutu
"Realistic Naruto" huh ?
When I read this title, Dream To Immortality(A Naruto Fanfic) came to my mind, it was a really realistic series which involved serious manipulation and mind-rape.
I hoped I could have the same feeling here, it just isn't the same.
Shameless Author here: I would like to thank all of you for reading my fan fic. It just motivates me that so many people would read my fic. And if you have any suggestions please dont be afraid to ask me.
It is great idea and it could be a great story but shift this from 'novel' section to 'fanfic' section .. aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
I don't know why, but mc just irritates so much ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Cerita yang Bagus , penulisannya Lumayan , Memiliki Alur Yang Bagus , Dan Penjelasan Tentang Chakra Dan Jutsu Serta Pelatihan Tubuh Bagus , Benar² Konsep yang Bagus , Aku Harap Kedepannya Akan Ada Lagi lebih banyak Konsep dan penjelasan Jutsu Dan Pelatihan Lagi , bukan Hanya omong kosong seperti Fanfic lain oooo**
The reincarnation story is not as realistic as the title suggests, but for a green writer, it isn't bad. I love the new Dojutsu, but I find it completely unnecessary when he already has Mokuton. The baby should have been traveling with Tsunade and Shizune after the death of his parents. Backstory I made up: some Senju parents (Tsunade's cousin is the father) leave the village to live safely away from the shinobi life and death. The mother gets assassinated during her pregnancy after the sudden death of her husband. In this story, the being saves the child by having Tsunade walk by and reincarnates you instead of the baby that should not have existed. The mother still dies because this is her fate one way or another. I mean, this is important for the creation of a relevant main character. I believe that the writer would have had an easier time with the story if he added only the Dojutsu to the mc. No need for a headache to sort the backstory, if you know what I mean.
A great fanfic. It's very hard to find good fanfic and good writing style. But, author is one of the rare kind. He is already jonin level writer. Hopefully we will see a lot of chapters on this story.
good good luck
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its good more chapters please more chapters pleasemore chapters pleasemore chapters pleasemore chapters pleasemore chapters pleasemore chapters please
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Love the realistic approach to storytelling and the unique direction it heading!!! Even just looking at mc and mother relationship is awesome.
Great story, but one thing bothers me a lot. That is, the main character's kokugan. Don't you think 20 x speed is a bit too much? I mean there is literally no genkai that can ever hope to match it if MC can just blitz everything when he gets strong enough. Please nerf it, or add some backlash. I mean MC just goes 30 times faster than his original speed and just drains his chakra. If MC is as fast as Naruto in Boruto, then he can easily one shot every opponent so far. Just feels extremely unrealistic for a bloodline to be this op. Not to mention, if someone had the bloodline before him, then how is it still unknown?
"Realistic Naruto" huh ? When I read this title, Dream To Immortality(A Naruto Fanfic) came to my mind, it was a really realistic series which involved serious manipulation and mind-rape. I hoped I could have the same feeling here, it just isn't the same.