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You need to work on grammar, I get confused just reading 1 paragraph. At least you included what the character looks like but you contradicted yourself by saying he looks ordinary and then saying he look like a beautiful young teenager.

it's a real good story, but i would like to provide my unnecessary input to the author: 1) Please try to proofread if you can, but it's not much important, so even if you don't it works for me 2) Please make sure the MC doesn't start getting girls like Ash catching Pokemons, currently the pace is good, but just don't everyone to his Harem 3) Maybe make Fi go SkyNet just for fun? (a recommendation)

Story is good, however the reason that its not five stars is because the grammer is so hard to understand. Sometimes the author uses quotations for speaking and sometimes he uses hyphins. The author also needs to work on sentence flow otherwise the story is great and entertaining

5 year old simp on crack, this is the most simple explanation I can give anyone, not recommend. But some of you have no taste so go ahead and lose a few brain cells.

It's a pretty good story. Frankly, you only have to work on your grammar and vocabulary and this will be a nicer book to read. However, it's not unreadable unlike other fanfictions in this platform. For the romance part of the story, I think that the relationship between the MC and the girls are progressing a bit too fast. The female leads are coming off as a choroine(easy to get heroine). Let's take for example, his relationship with Alice. You could have let atleast a few months pass before developing the relationship like that. Good looks does give a good impression but it's not everything there is in forming a bond. The first meeting could have progressed into something like a getting-to-know-each-other kinda format. I mean, which girl would just so easily enter a man's house, someone who she just met at that. Aside from those points, I really enjoyed my time reading this. I hope you could update this again, author. God bless and good luck in your future endeavours.

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