My Slaughter System
In a world full of abilities, there existed a lonesome boy by the name of Lachlan Grayford, who was not only ousted from his family; but also severely bullied by his peers. He was once a bright, charming child who was expected to take up the mantels of his household but was left crushed and dejected instead.
When Lachlan was finally of age to be infused with the X-Virus, the virus that brought out the ability deep within ones cells, he was left hapless. The virus hadn't reacted to his cells and hence left him without an ability.
This small minority of people who could never get an ability were called ability-cripples, and Lachlan, unfortunately, became one of them.
Consequently, his family, which he had loved, ousted him from their house and labeled him as deceased, to be shipped off to the other side of the planet to rot. Lachlan, who no longer had the status as a Grayford, and perceived by the people around him as only an ability crippled orphan, became severely bullied - and looked down upon by everyone.
When he finally turned the age of 16 and was a summer away from attending Military School. He was met with an even worsened outcome. His cruel classmates, that had bullied him for years, went overboard and threw him of a cliff.
As he laid on the ground strewn with flora and his own blood, something sharp in his ear ringed; awakening him from his unconsciousness.
‹ Slaughter System has awoken ›
WARNING
My Slaughter System contains gore, extreme violence, rape, reverse rape, sex, depravation, a bit of mind-break, netori and probably all the other shit that should be stated on a warning label. Don't fret though, I'm a firm believer of vengeance, and not the boring, righteous kind ;)
You've been warned!
av/words ch 1-13 = 2500 words
av/words ch 13+ = 1300 words
World background has been described very well along with the character design. The writing quality so far has proven to be of high standard as there is no grammar errors I picked up on. Few questions though - Will this be fast paced quick growth mc (what I prefer)? What is the update schedule like currently because it doesn’t show any number? As long as you don’t have any other things going on I would love to see a daily or more upload schedule. Overall though great story I’m looking forward to where this is going and keep up the great work!
Honestly this book is very good just judging from the starting chapters I have read. The way you write is awesome. You have a vast vocab and very good construction, but I have to say the only thing disappointing is the update schedule, I wont sugar coat it its horrendous but other than that everything is great keep up the good work[img=recommend].
Another cool type of sci-fi. Hope the MC will find his way to overcome his ordeal somehow. I truly can't wait for its continuation. Hope it'll continue and quench my curiosity about what will happen next.
Overall it’s really great . Really recommended it’s not unique I mean there’s a lot Novel that has similar to this but this one It’s really captivating. The world background are really explained well you’ll really know how to imaginary the how things work.character and mc all great there’s nothing much to say ,you can tell when you read it it’s really great especially the characters it reflect to mc’s actions if they are trash then slaughtered if they fine as gem then he take care simple as that.progression or development is really the main factor about this story it’s not forced and had way to much progression which is good since it’s not that had much fast pace also not slow as well . Overall its enjoyable.
What can I tell you, author? The story at first is pretty good. The only thing that bothers me is the way you rushed things. As soon as the MC wakes up, he runs through the forest, after running through the forest he meets the road where he gets on the bus that takes him back to the orphanage where the children who intimidate him kill him, why would you go back to the same place where they killed you? unanswered. After arriving at the orphanage, the MC is thrown to a military school in minutes where he is registered and it does not take long before he finds an arrogant boy whom the MC is going to kill in a few more chapters, or even go so far as to say that in the next chapter. In short, author, do not rush the story. Things are going too fast. Not even five chapters passed before the MC who is a cowardly boy turned into a cruel one. Yes, two months passed within the world of history, but for the MC and for us it was a matter of seconds.
Writing quality is something that I should consider as a 'master piece ' . It's literally too good. But updates r not stable. Do hope that author will sort that issue out. Am gonna to be permanent reader. Nice job Author.
OH...MY...GOD!!! Being a sci-fi reader a heart, I definitely approve of this. It's original, it sucks you in right from the start, and the plot is very well done! Sci-fi/alien/superhero readers, you need to read this!
I don't read Sci-fi at all. As it's not my favourite genre or anything but let me tell you this is really very different then what I thought. The concept of virus and it's effect. the writing style and flow of the sentences are just amazing. it came really smoothly without any mistakes. I must say I recommend this to all whoever like Sci-fi this is a gems for them.
Excellent, excellent novel! Everything is there, and the start is really awesome. A DEFINITE must-read for light novel fans. Just jump in to chapter 1 and make your decision after you read it.
Great description, edgy plot and overall good writing. One of the best I've read here even though it's just 3 chapters in I hope the writer keeps up with the good work and also keep up with the update... it is highly needed because of the we that lack patience;) And to those who are thinking, sould I read... READ! IT'S AN ORDER!
This book is well charactered with many different scenes that spike up my curiosity. The setting was designed so well that I could see the actual scene in my head. I wonder how you wrote such a magnificent book!
The prologue chapter was really good in my opinion, a bit too long, but I feel like it covered all the ground necessary for us to understand the kind of world we're going into. It gave background of the virus and the war from it's development to the supposed end of the war. The concept itself is very anime like, which I don't mind cuz I like anime, but I hope it doesn't only follow the usual anime style concerning characters not having abilities in an ability world, kinda like my hero academia, looking forward to some cool twists. The writing is nice and easy to follow behind
I really enjoyed the read, I think beyond anything this book could definitely be looked back on in the past based on to its allusions to issues happening worldwide. Vocabulary was top notch, and I thought I used a bunch of words in my story but this has to take the cake.
The whole story is good. So many timeskips and the X-Virus is kinda similar to COVID-19. I didn't expect your chapters to have so many "—", and the first chapter doesn't have a speech, which is quite shocking. In overall, I had fun reading yours. Keep it up and good luck on your writing journey.
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