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Hello, Author here. I hope you enjoy the story; if you do, please add it to your collection, and the story will continue. Thank you, Readers.

I am posting this comment to help encourage the author to write more of this novel as I really like this novel and the direction where the novel is heading

Haah where to start this has an amazingly fast progression rate and I love that as well as having a profound character, ok maybe not the last one but I think you get the point I have no idea how to improve this novel except keep it going author the grammar is exceptional, and MC has an amazing backstory for revenge and I hope he gets his revenge as well😜

Goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood job and its a good story. Its plot is pretty goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood

👍I recommendㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤ

so far it has been a really good novel but unfortunately I have one complaint and it is that I'm kinda confused on how the blessings would work

This...is...just so...GGGGGGGGGGGOOOOOOOOOOOOODDDDDDDDDD!

While the story isnt high quality it seems like you actually care about it which i respect Hope you have fun writing Some suggestions to improve would be to read/ skim what you write and try to follow it yourself While doing that anytime you catch yourself trting to fill in some sort of blank in the story (like trust that comes out of nowhere when they run into eachother in the hallway) find a way to incorporate it into the text so the reader understands what you meant Tldr: write what needs to be written to explain to someone who has never read the story instead of writing what needs to be written to explain to yourself