Project: iaseki V1
Shot by his own sister, to death or whatever, he knows not. All Lu knows is that he was transported to the world of Monitum, the first full-dive videogame created by his own sister Leila.
Lu, being one of the best players in the world, thought it's going to be all too easy for him to live in this new world, but when people and monster alike are aiming for his head after they see the darkness of his hair and eyes, survival became quite the nightmare.
He meets Esther by chance, a fox spirit child who wishes to find her own family, and the only other "person" who doesn't see anything wrong with his eyes and hair. She asks him to help her and in turn promises to help him as well. While Lu wasn't too keen on the offer, he accepts it anyway, not knowing the details, and because of this, he's getting a lot more than what he bargained for.
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really nice story, the story and the character backgrounds make you want to keep reading, haven't noticed any spelling mistakes while reading. All in all a very nice story and something I would keep reading if I was still updating.
badly done synopsis tells us more about how he died than the entire story so far, the mc can somehow use a room that shows virtual reality in that world as proof that he is from another world because his sister? designed it. this was so poorly thought out that I do not recommend readesing like ever
This series is good practice for something that is probably one of the writer's first attempts at writing a novel. The action is confusing, and the sequence of events are hard to follow. Imagery is almost completely absent. Even little things like describing facial expressions or the MC's thoughts would help a lot. The setting and background are full of holes. A more dramatic start would involve narrating the MC's actions as he lives the last day of his life and start from there. Little is known about him, which makes it hard to connect to him. There are a number of plot holes. The MC was supposed to be an expert in this game, yet he doesn't know about aurum or how to sign up at the adventurer's guild? He doesn't have the basic common sense of this world at all. One character who identifies him as a aurum and works with him anyway later forgets all about it and attacks him again. Is the MC starting as a low-level player or is he in his original body or using his maxed-out stats or what? None of this is clarified. Since he was injured and in bed, I pictured him as wearing nothing but a pair of pants or else nothing at all. However, no one's mentioned him being topless or barefoot. Aside from his dark eyes and hair color, I don't know what he looks like at all. Maybe he weighs 400 lbs and is covered in tattoos or ceremonial scars. I have no idea. There are a number of unanswered questions here, and the writing just buzzes by them. I feel like I'm reading a plot line summary rather than the written story itself.