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Yonko, wow you wrote again a new book. How many books will you add in the competition. I just hope you can win and write better. Congratulations!

I really like this writer's style of writing. Though there are mistakes, they are minimal, with the rest of it being very clean. The introduction to the world is sharp, with no tomfoolering to the point. The introducing of main points that this world shall center on is well done. The design of the mc is also pretty sharp, with the only problem being that genericity might overwhelm him compared to other charachters, but as of now, only five chapters are out, giving you loads of time to improve that. The world is good enough so far for a story like this, but I would reccomend fleshing it out more, not just the parts of an adventurer. The name of the book/world is probably best as a placeholder and not the final name. Good work.

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