The mc randomly Becomes arrogant, the grammar is awful, and all the mc does is practically Steal money from kids.
3 years ago
6
KATARINA
I like everything. I don't care about the grammar because I read worse (Chinese fanfic and translated through Google translate) and so all well interesting idea and yes I also do not know English well. But the piece itself is good
3 years ago
2
Zona_Nimex
One thing I hate about someone who writes fanfic is leaving his work, I hope you're not one of them. for the whole story it's pretty good but it's a shame when I translate it into my language the translation is a bit lacking so please fix it. I hope this story is written to the end.
3 years ago
0
TheKingOfSusx
The story has a lot of potential but the bad grammar ruins it,I can understand the fact that english is not your main language but you can have someone proofread and fix your work if possible.
3 years ago
0
Yardan_Dua
everything here is ok except for the grammar. Author if you are reading this please fix the grammar. Everything else is good though you just need to fix your grammar
The mc randomly Becomes arrogant, the grammar is awful, and all the mc does is practically Steal money from kids.
I like everything. I don't care about the grammar because I read worse (Chinese fanfic and translated through Google translate) and so all well interesting idea and yes I also do not know English well. But the piece itself is good
One thing I hate about someone who writes fanfic is leaving his work, I hope you're not one of them. for the whole story it's pretty good but it's a shame when I translate it into my language the translation is a bit lacking so please fix it. I hope this story is written to the end.
The story has a lot of potential but the bad grammar ruins it,I can understand the fact that english is not your main language but you can have someone proofread and fix your work if possible.
everything here is ok except for the grammar. Author if you are reading this please fix the grammar. Everything else is good though you just need to fix your grammar