Hey, author, here I'm doing this review to give you more insight on what's going on. First of all, the system won't be the main focus it's only there to release a set of missions and gives her a status board, and that's it
Another thing is that I can't promise a set schedule, but ill try and release two chapters a week.
3 years ago
2
KHRIKY
A few mistakes here and there but other than that the world building and the way the fl describes how she dies was super cool. I'm going to read the rest of the book but so far, it's really interesting!
3 years ago
2
keulijeu
The plot is good and addicting! These types of books aren't my thing but they kinda give a cling to me that makes me wanna read it. Of course there're errors cause the author's new but errors aside it's a fantastic book!
3 years ago
1
Heep40
I cant say for everybody but i did enjoy myself reading this i personally enjoyed reading the fight scene with the Minotaur it got me gawking
3 years ago
1
Remiel_Skye
Great work author i really enjoyed what you have written one thing you could improve on is your fight choreography but everything else is okay
3 years ago
1
ArtcCerberus
I would definitely recommend this novel if you are the type of reader to enjoy a good fantasy dungeon novel. while there are only 3 chapters I had no problem with the way the author writes. I suggest proofreading once you think it's ready for publication.
Amazing work hoping for more
3 years ago
1
UniVerseLessOne
I like the system and missions of this story. It blends quite nicely with the fact that it is about fighting minotaurs, goblins, and all that.
It has 'Pick up Girls in a Dungeon' vibe. Instead of Bell Cranel you get, Ais Wallenstein.
3 years ago
1
Stormzz
There isn't enough of the novel to give a full review yet.
The pacing and introduction to the plot and world is interesting, but let down by poor punc. and grammar. The second chapter was a lot better than the first though.
I'd recommend reading back through and fixing your mistakes (Missing capitalisation, double periods, no markers for internal monologue I noticed) and it will improve a lot.
Other than that keep writing!!
3 years ago
1
Twitchy_
As other reviews say, the only thing that needs work is your grammar. Other than that, I look forward to reading the rest, whenever you plan to update it. Definitely going in my collections!
3 years ago
1
Rayne_Rue
So far the plot is interesting, I would love it if you edit where there need some editions keep it, Author, I love how your creation just fix the mistakes and this book will surely make it, I love your work and will recommend it.
3 years ago
1
Ice_Princesss
So far so good. Your grammar and punctuation got better in chapter 2. I suggest using Grammarly to help you with grammar and punctuation. It's also my first time reading a novel where it's a woman who has been reborn in a new world of magic and gods. Looking forward to more chapters and will change my rating once there's more to read. I've also added the novel to my library. All the best!
3 years ago
1
ByDefault
Interesting... Interesting.... Interesting... aight I won't even lie, I'm here for yuri
Hey, author, here I'm doing this review to give you more insight on what's going on. First of all, the system won't be the main focus it's only there to release a set of missions and gives her a status board, and that's it Another thing is that I can't promise a set schedule, but ill try and release two chapters a week.
A few mistakes here and there but other than that the world building and the way the fl describes how she dies was super cool. I'm going to read the rest of the book but so far, it's really interesting!
The plot is good and addicting! These types of books aren't my thing but they kinda give a cling to me that makes me wanna read it. Of course there're errors cause the author's new but errors aside it's a fantastic book!
I cant say for everybody but i did enjoy myself reading this i personally enjoyed reading the fight scene with the Minotaur it got me gawking
Great work author i really enjoyed what you have written one thing you could improve on is your fight choreography but everything else is okay
I would definitely recommend this novel if you are the type of reader to enjoy a good fantasy dungeon novel. while there are only 3 chapters I had no problem with the way the author writes. I suggest proofreading once you think it's ready for publication. Amazing work hoping for more
I like the system and missions of this story. It blends quite nicely with the fact that it is about fighting minotaurs, goblins, and all that. It has 'Pick up Girls in a Dungeon' vibe. Instead of Bell Cranel you get, Ais Wallenstein.
There isn't enough of the novel to give a full review yet. The pacing and introduction to the plot and world is interesting, but let down by poor punc. and grammar. The second chapter was a lot better than the first though. I'd recommend reading back through and fixing your mistakes (Missing capitalisation, double periods, no markers for internal monologue I noticed) and it will improve a lot. Other than that keep writing!!
As other reviews say, the only thing that needs work is your grammar. Other than that, I look forward to reading the rest, whenever you plan to update it. Definitely going in my collections!
So far the plot is interesting, I would love it if you edit where there need some editions keep it, Author, I love how your creation just fix the mistakes and this book will surely make it, I love your work and will recommend it.
So far so good. Your grammar and punctuation got better in chapter 2. I suggest using Grammarly to help you with grammar and punctuation. It's also my first time reading a novel where it's a woman who has been reborn in a new world of magic and gods. Looking forward to more chapters and will change my rating once there's more to read. I've also added the novel to my library. All the best!
Interesting... Interesting.... Interesting... aight I won't even lie, I'm here for yuri
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