Unordinary Magus

Shameless author here! Hello! Hope you're having a good day reading my novel! As this is my second book, please do not hesitate to point out mistakes and flaws in the story and do throw in some stones, vote, send this to your library, send gifts, and everything in your power for this novel to improve a lot! Also, please try to comment, so that I'll know what your thoughts are guys! Do it on paragraph comments too! That way this novel will become interactive! I hope you give this novel a try and enjoy!

This novel is for me, a 10/10. I swear it has too much potential. There is magic and technology. A protagonist with very good development. The world of this story has too much to tell. As a reader, I fully recommend this.

This novel has potential! And the author is improving drastically. I must say that the novel is decent and applaudable. The story is well crafted and the characters are behaving realistically. I am rooting for the Mc and can't wait for more journeys he will face [img=recommend]

Solid plot with a concept that is in no way too hard to internalize. The characters are not complete buffoons, either, which makes this both readable and entertaining. However, in order to avoid sugarcoating things I must mention that the dialogue could be improved. In the very beginning - not as much in the later chapters - the dialogue has a synthetic feel because the infodump comes through the characters and their speech. Overall a good read. Thank you for your hard work, author.

The start is amazing and sucks you right in, the writing style is great and the story is easy the follow. The first few chapters do an excellent job at displaying that there are larger things at hand than just what we are shown. The worldbuilding is another strong factor. This story is sent in a world that has both technology and magic, opening up a lot of possibilities in the future. All in all, this is a very enjoyable read and the story has a lot of ways it could branch out into different, interesting scenarios. If you are reading this review, you should give it a try at the very least.

Amazing! Very intense from the start. The world background is so intriguing and fascinating that you’re hooked from the get go. And the words come together to create such a beautiful tale. Amazing.

OP Main Character check Magic Cultivation check thats all i need to be honest. Loving the personality of our protagonist. Older brother seemed a little annoying to me but nothing over the top. Can't wait for more.

_______________ This is amazing! The story is very interesting and I liked it. It's a great book, so great work author! {A power stone for you!}

The story is over all great. Like how the flow goes as well. Isn't too fast paced either. Really like how things fall into place naturally. Keep it up.

Wow! It's been a long time since I read another novel with good writing, a story, world-building, and everything. It's a hidden gem. I'm eagerly waiting for the next chapter!

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Currently you're on a good track. Worldbuilding and characters so far have been quite fine. Since you already have some experience I'll get to the issues I found personally. 1. The evil stepmother seems extremely weird. We don't really have a motive for why she's making her children bully and torture the MC. Also, the father seems to be rather ignornant of the situation. He even smiled which is rather weird, unless he's part of the plot to torture his own son? 2. The old beggar that knows that value of the pill, and to never sell or give it away, simply gave it to the MC right after his daughter died. This felt extremely weird since he could've gotten rid of it beforehand for money and possibly saved his daughter? I think this part needs to be explained or elaborated more. Far too convenient and a bit unbelievable. 3. Currently the MC also seems too unreliable and uncapable. For me personally, it's not that bad, but remember webnovel readers kinda hate MCs that are too weak so you have to give him that boost soon or you're looking at a long play story with good execution to make up for it. Those are the current issues I found in the first 6 chapters. I can't find anywhere else to point out since the story is too new, but hope the pacing and action picks up soon.

OuO so it's mana cultivation eh Anyway, I like the start. The pace is fast and draws you in without much of an effort, the world background is still being set so no comments there. What I like the most about this body, however, is the WRITING QUALITY! oof! The writing quality is top tier and that compared with this quick-paced story, I think this will be an interesting read *Dabs in style*

I like the start of this novel, I hope author doesn't mess this up. /..................................................................................