This story revolves around Masako, a failed artificial human project. Without any form of consciousness or will it was left withering away while the world fell unto chaos...

With a miracle of obtaining free will, they awoken only to be left on an abandoned world where any signs of intelligence were extinguished.

Follow through Masako's life in an abandoned world.


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This is my first time writing so I really appreciate it if there are any constructive criticism. It would be a great help for me to know what aspects I need to improve.

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Tags:
#dark #darkfantasy #femaleprotagonist #genderbend #genderbender #horror #loli #original #reincarnation #science-fantasy #sliceoflife #tragedy

Masako's Life In An Abandoned World

REINCARNATION

DARK

SLICEOFLIFE

Idk why I can't leave a vote just because I used japanese characters as a cool looking font. 

But even if I update it webnovel won't let me vote. So whether the voting would be disabled in price for the cool looking font on my latest chapter is worth it or not would be up to my reader.

If you want to vote to support me just let me know. I'll try to think of other ways without hindering the quality of my writing.

Writing Quality is good. The author gives out details nicely, but by doing it a tad too much, it got a little boring. Maybe add a breather after describing one scene, like how the character felt. For example, in my opinion, how would you feel when you see yourself being hit by a truck? Now how would your character feel it even though he/she was in third POV. Lastly, edit, edit ,edit. You have a good grasp of grammar, you need to watch out for doubled, misplaced words, commas and stuff though. Overall, good job!

The story development is nice, albeit as I said, a tad too fast because of the information overload that I was getting. The sequence of the story is well-done though. You really just need to remove, or revise some words here and there.

Character Design is decent. I felt that you could put more emotions into them, if that makes sense.

The World Background is good! I perceived it as somewhat of an apocalyptic world where experiments on humans (hybrids?) were done and the mc got back from his dream of the past.

Overall, good job! I know it's difficult to write but you can do it! Good luck!

5 stars for self motivation.

For new readers, please leave a review! I will gladly appreciate it if you point out some things I could improve on so I can grow as an author.

this stoy gave me a new insight for parallel world and the setting author tried to show can be easily understood 
the details provided are also nicely portrayed.
the plot is fun to read .

I like the unique storyline, it captures the genre of slice of life pretty well. I hope the pacing is consistent and the transitioning in scenes is improved a little more. However, for a starter, this book is immaculate ✨✨ Dear author, please keep uploading more!!!!!

please tell us where you have gone, author! tell us!!!!!