Rejected Alpha
“REJECTION”
“ A painful and wonderful experience
to either become pheonix touching sky
or ash
which will only end up with dirt.”
~A boy with inhumane power who live in disguise of weak~
~A ruthless Alpha who only know power and strength~
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Ash is a weak boy for the red moon pack. An easy to bully target.Nobody Actually know him well. He is just want to be left alone. But he met his mate on his 18th birthday who happens to be Dylan Smith.
Dylan Smith Alpha of Red moon pack. A ruthless bloody wolf who only power and strength rather than humanity.
What will happen when Alpha reject the boy just because of disguise.
“Will they walk down path of no returns or this is a start blooming love story.”
Nice and fresh story l must say.... But the paragraph is a little too big... But its okay u can cut it as there is not a many chapters.... But liked the concept and always a fan of this kind of story.... So all the very best and do upload more so that l can read what gonna happen next...😉😉
I like the idea of introspection. It introduces us to the scenario to reproduce: what personal goals: school goals. Those that can be met by analyzing the classroom environment and the social environment. It transcends the nobility of the writer, in everything said. That halo of family nostalgia is his impulse to get ahead. A "school" life in the middle of two extreme and dissimilar forms of life: "that of the parents" and his own... to be defined, with his own family but very far from there.
Its a good story i enjoyed the plot And the aim youre going For, do try to break it into smaller paragraphs and also more focused on your grammatical accuracy[img=recommend]
Hello and an honest review from me. Your story is so detailed that you even include some unnecessary scenes. Also, try to break down the long paragraphs especially in the dialogue part so that readers wouldn't get confused when reading. You will get to improve so don't worry and fighting author 👍🏻
A nice intresting story author. A small suggestion your story is very detailed indeed gives a clear picture of what is happening but try breaking the paragraphs smaller and try to remove the unwanted stuff.
It's good story. I hope you will go with smaller paragraphs to read. There is hope of improvement. so please keep going. ✌️👍👍 Best of luck .