North Of Lies

Hello guys, The Author of this novel here! Just wanted to let you guys know I can take criticism and use it to make my novel better than what it was before. Also please point out any issues or concerns you have with this novel as well. Enjoy reading!

Reveal Spoiler

I love the development of the novel, and your writing skills. Everything is in place and it's interesting. I hope Jin would be able to do great things I believe that too. Nice job author.

I LOVE THIS STORY SO FAR! The concepts and character development so far has so much potential. I trust that you will make the correct choices in your writing. I am excited to see how the story progresses. Keep it up !

Read a few chapters and overall, for your first story (?), it’s not bad at all. I really like your writing style, choice of wording, and judging from your sentence structures and grammar, your story has true potential to evolve. However, I found it quite hard to catch up with the story’s progression. Maybe it’s because there are a lot of metaphors….even in the summary/synopsis. Personally, as a reader, I prefer to know what exactly is happening in the story and usually avoid stories that beat around the bush. However, these are just my personal thoughts. Firstly, I guess I can say that the summary needs fixing, try making it more straightforward so that readers would know what the story is about…much faster. You are free, though, to render your story however you like! Once again, I wish you luck in your writing process and have fun!

In relation to this being the author's first story, its quite good. There is a fundamental understanding of world building and character development seen within the story and alot of effort has been put into the story. My review is being done on the basis of reading the first 2 chapters and the introduction of chapter 3. Personally, I believe that the first chapter doesn't do well in establishing the story, to me it doesn't transition well from the first to second chapter (ch) and rather than labelling it as the first ch it would be more beneficial to have it be labelled as a prologue as it would convey to the readers that the ch is more of a separate introductory, independant from the beginning of the story as by labelling it as the first ch it may confuse the audience when going from 1st to 2nd. In addition it may be better to actually have the 2nd ch be the 1st ch instead. Another problem I had was the change from 1st to 3rd person writing, it feels unnatural to switch from a character perspective to a outside perspective, although it does make sense for ch 1 and 2, the change from 3rd to 1st person writing from the 2nd to 3rd ch feels out of place. Despite my critiques, I still think that this story does have some potential and while it may not be a hit, it is still quite the good story for a first time author and im excited to see what comes next.

W novel, W writing, W art. Only bad part is L author. [img=faceslap]. Could also do more with showing and less telling, and some parts are a bit too cliche, such as the line "with great power comes great responsibility. Idk about that one chief

This novel deserves more recognition. The author's writing style is 🤌🏻✨️ It's very poetic which makes the story engrossing to read. There were a few errors here and there but they're only minor and can be easily fixed with a bit of proofreading. The action scenes were good but not quite there yet. I didn't feel thrilled while reading the fight scenes...or maybe that's just me 🤷🏻‍♂️ Also, there's a lack of description for other supporting characters. Plotwise, it's quite good. The prologue got me specifically intrigued. Keep it up author 👏🏻

A very well done novel. It's always nice to see a first person novel done well. It reads comfortably, and works under an interesting premise. Looking forward to seeing more.

A good novel that grabs you from the first chapter. The descriptions of the world and the experiences of the characters are well felt. There are philosophical reflections at some points, the text, where the description of the task or magic is well highlighted, does not merge with the rest of the novel. You can see how the author is perfecting his writing of this story.

Really loved your writing skills.the character and background is so well written really appreciate your hard work. Keep it up author.

Just finished reading the first three chapter and... Not bad! I am already captivated by Jin's determination to keep moving forward despite his difficult circumstances. I am eager to see how he will progress and influence the story for sure. Keep it up ^^

Reveal Spoiler

Considering there are only two chapters to this fairly new novel (being a remake of the author's previous works titled 'Reincarnation of the Fallen God'). I simply cannot provide a lengthy nor detailed review, but from what I have read thus far I see the vision the author holds. And I feel as though the direction this novel is taking will be more concise and clear, as previous works (refer to previous title) were cluttered with WIP concepts and character profiles that felt all too exaggerated. The first two chapters of this novel depicts a vast storyline that has the potential to captivate readers, and I can personally tell that the author pours their very heart and soul into this novel. However, the strength of this novel will lie in the ability of the author to continue developing the early narrative of this work. As well as the ability to sustain current plot development whilst providing a vision for the future of this novel. My review will continue to evolve as the author evolves their writing and overcomes many literary challenges.