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First of all, welcome to everyone who decides to give a bit of their time to read my story. I'll shamelessly give myself a review to not only give you an idea of ​​what I'm looking for with the novel but also to set a goal for the quality that I want to achieve. I've written (or at least tried) a few short stories before but they all failed as they didn't convince me, I'm very serious with this trying to give them a satisfying plot and development without sacrificing world-building, the first few chapters may be a bit long but it was a necessary evil, from chapter 5 onwards I will try to keep them to 1500 words for easy and fluent reading. Without further ado, I hope you like the story and comment on everything you like and likewise, what you don't, I'm open to constructive criticism.

Interesting story. The plot just made me curious. Although there are a few grammatical errors, I can understand that. I may not be very familiar with story genre games, but this story has made my curiosity recur. Good job, author.

A good novel not my type but it has agood plot also god charter building and a few grammital error over all its ok actually but hope you make more chapters.