Diabolic Occult Of The Forsaken

Loving the story so far. This has the beginnings of a beautifully written historical fiction novel. I really felt like I was reading a classic literary work of fiction. I wonder if you have studied literature before, because your descriptive writing is gorgeous, I hope to improve my writing to be more like the way you are able to describe settings and characters, in a flowing and animated, not boring way. I don’t really have major suggestions or criticism, someone already pointed out the length, but personally it’s not a problem for me, you should write as long or as short as you see fit to the plot of your story! This is the first story I’ve come across on Webnovel that I would really gush about for the writing style. I look forward to reading more about what will happen next, there seems to be different layers unfolding in the narrative and I’m intrigued to see where you will take the novel. Keep writing, and I hope your novel keeps getting more attention as it deserves to be more popular even though you only have a few chapters up so far.

Author here, At first the story is a bit slowly paced around the first few (prologue ~ 3) chapters, however the narration pace quickens after you get past those few chapters. This story will be primarily historical, dystopian, fantasy, horror and suspense. Romance is a secondary genre which will come into play later on, however please note that this is DARK romance, so there may be some scenes that are unethical. The fantasy aspect will be more focused on after the first 5~10 chapters as well—though there are hints and mentions of it at the start. If you have any suggestions, comments or questions, please leave them below, thanks!

"Ines Lacroix: The Curse of the Empyrean" is a riveting dark fantasy novel that weaves a compelling tale of occult powers and the complexities of fate. The author skillfully crafts a world where misfortune follows the protagonist, Ines, from the day of her birth, making her journey all the more captivating. The prologue sets an enchanting stage within the century-old bookstore, where a mysterious old woman with a single beady eye watches the world go by. The vivid descriptions create an immersive atmosphere, drawing readers into the intriguing world of the novel. Ines's journey as an Empyrean, blessed by the Heavenly Bodies, unfolds with impressive pacing and depth. The author's ability to navigate various genres, including historical, horror, thriller/suspense, and dark fantasy, adds a rich layer of intrigue and excitement to the narrative. The prologue sets an eerie atmosphere in the century-old bookstore, where a mysterious old woman observes customers with a single beady eye. While the descriptive language adds to the scene's ambiance, the prose occasionally veers towards being too "fancy" and overly elaborate. Striking a better balance between evocative imagery and more concise descriptions would improve the overall readability and engagement. Later on in the novel: The transition from Ines' discomfort in the carriage to her emotional reflection on her uncertain destination feels a bit abrupt. Further development of her thoughts and emotions during this journey would create a smoother flow and provide more insight into her perspective. Ines' nightmares and her use of tea leaves to alleviate insomnia are intriguing elements. However, the narrative could benefit from a more seamless transition between Ines' dreams and her thoughts on using the tea leaves. Weaving these elements together more fluidly would enhance the narrative's cohesion. But what's important is the novel's ability to captivate its readers? Does the author manage to accomplish this? Well, the novel's exploration of occult themes, possession, and supernatural elements contributes to its unique and thrilling allure. Ines's encounters with witches, elves, and the Kingdom Building elements enrich the plot and introduce a dynamic world full of surprises. Fans of dark fantasy, historical, and thriller genres will undoubtedly find themselves captivated by Ines's journey as she grapples with her cursed existence and navigates a world filled with magic and misfortune.

Okay so! I picked up this book on whim because I was looking for new books to read since l'm new to Webnovel, and so far so good! I really love the authors way of words, down to how they describe scenes and characters as well. I can tell this is very systematic and I know an unexpected ending is to come- I don't think l'm emotionally ready yet -,- Right now my favorite characters is Ines and Edith, I'm liking how everything is portrayed and how the author leaves blanks like we fill it subconsciously but when it is filled that is where the twist lies. And that's something I enjoy! Not knowing what to expect, I am a fan of horror. And lastly of course I came bc of the tag! Historical romance I must see this -//- Overall good work author! I've tried doing writing myself and sometimes I like when an author has gotten they're flow down and know what style works best for them and I think you've perfected you're craft!

Beautifully written! I love the way you described the characters, the situation, and the setting.. I look forward to future chapters, keep up the great work! :)

The details have a finesse that makes you imagine being present. Your writing is extremely good! I hope to see more chapters from you! Five stars, a worth read.

I've already reached the end (25 chapters) and I want more. The writing is magnificent and invites you to follow the heavy and tragic destiny of a heroine betrayed and darkened by her world. Keep going on author-san!🙂

Currently on Chapter 6 of the story and have to put a book mark to read more soon. So far the story is amazing and the skill of scenery is just next level. I could honestly see myself reading this as an actual hardcover book. But all in all I will have another updated review once I catchup to the lastest chapters. Until then this is easily a 5 out of 5 stars and deserves more attention. Just a masterpiece of writing

I loved the story from beginning to the latest chapter even tho I had to research a few times for the meaning of certain words that wasn't familiar with me. Your narration is top tier and I would agree with the others that everything does feel like a Psychological Horror than a Romance. Your novel definitely deserves to gain much attention and I'm looking forward to future chapters And oh, I love Yvette btw.

This book is unlike any novel I have ever read. It is like a horror film and has a gothic style to it. I loved how the writing could make me feel. At one point I even got goosebumps. Also, gotta appreciate the beautiful cover.

Review of my first impression of the novel, based on the synopsis and the first chapter so it's probably that I will edit it in the future. Very good writing quality:rich in the dictionary but maybe with too long sentences. Hopefully, with time, the update frequency will increase. The story seems quite slow-paced and focused on describing mainly the psychological side of the story. For the same psychological description, the quality of the character design of the old madam seems of high quality. As for the world background we had just a hint of fantasy in the end of the 1st chapter leaving the reader with many questions. Finally, I recommend the read to the fans of the historical-fantasy genre. Keep it up author👍

So far I loved the story. Only read few chapters but I found it interesting. Our mc is also written good. World building is also slowly opening. Can’t wait to read more.

Enjoyed the story so far, at chapter 12, the creepy elements in it gives it life. Reading this novel is best at night! Keep it up its great work!

Pretty good story! Really great so far, looks a bit peculiar, sure. But the characters and all the environment are incredibly captivating, keeping me hooked since the first chapter. Highly recommend!