Echoes of Madness: Fragments of Us
David's life is a patchwork of shadowed memories and broken whispers, a canvas painted with the bruises of his past. As a child, the haven of his grandparents' home became his refuge, a lighthouse guiding him away from the storm of his early life. But the scars run deep, etching a map of fear that leads him into the wilderness of his own mind.
Enter Sarah—her smile, a dawn of new hope; her presence, a melody that soothes the cacophony of David's internal chaos. With her, David tastes the sweetness of joy long-forgotten, his world awash with newfound color. Yet, happiness is a horizon ever fleeting; when his grandmother's death shatters the calm, David is plunged once again into the abyss.
The bottle becomes his silent confidant, the numbness a cruel solace. Time warps around him, a mocking echo of stability he yearns for. In Sarah's shadow, paranoia blooms—a thorny vine wrapping its deceit around his thoughts. The spiral tightens; reality fractures.
David stands on the precipice, gazing into the void where reality and delusion meld and warp. His life, a tightrope walk between sanity's edge and the depths of madness. Can David navigate the labyrinth of his own psyche and emerge into the light, or will the darkness claim him in its silent embrace? This is not just a love story; it is a descent into the very heart of human fragility—a tale of one man's harrowing odyssey through the mind's darkest corridors in search of the elusive sunrise of peace.
Author here!!! writing just to ask for any and feedback as I am new to this, so thank you! also any thoughts will also be helpful. [img=update]
like the book and my name is the heading because my name is David
Very interesting. Chapters are less but is story is very impressive. Keep it up 👍👍
Hi... I am here to give some ideas about this work. As far, grammar is okay, story is okay. I personally don't find anything bad. But I have a suggestion for you. If you can make your paragraphs not so long as first chapter, I guess it will be more good. Keep going author. 👍
I am currently enjoying this book, despite some occasional moments of confusion, which are not particularly problematic. I am particularly fond of the author's writing style and vocabulary choices, which lend a refined quality to the story. Overall, I find the book to be quite engaging and well-written, and although there are some areas that could benefit from further clarification, they do not detract significantly from my enjoyment of the novel. In short, I would recommend this book to anyone looking for a well-crafted and engaging story.
Read first few chapters, really appreciated author hard work. I can see many potential in author. I support you , keep going author.[img=recommend]
The author of this story has a great ability to vividly describe the thoughts and emotions of their characters. From the first few chapters I read this seems like a tragedy. From the very first chapter, the author was able to hook me in and make me very invested in David's story.
The review is based on my first impression about the novel(synopsis, prologue and ch.1). Honestly the kind of m.c. (auto-destructive and possibly crazy) isn't my type but I'll try to be as objective as possible. The writing quality and richness in terminology are definitely high. The update frequency does not seem consistent, but if the author manages to keep this rhythm he's way over the 1 daily upload standard. The story development is quite slow(from the chapters we know only about his violent relationship with his father, addictive substances, start of relationship with Sarah, and possibly the beginning of some mental problem), but I personally still enjoyed the psychological rambling because of the before mentioned writing quality. For the pace I also used the synopsis as comparison and the story seems still quite unclear from what I read. The character design for the m.c. is really good but consequentially that of Sarah and his father are lacking, but this should be solved in the future. Finally the world background doesn't seem that original or specific, but from the end of the first chapter it seems to be thought mainly as the point of view that the m.c. has of it. Don't like this kind of bad ending(feel-bad stories) but I feel those who like the genre will surely find an interesting read in this novel. Keep it up, author👌
I do like the opening of the story - a lot of mystery and intrigue. Like there's a lot of question popping in your mind as in what happened to the MC and around him as you read along.
It's an intriguing approach, one that I've never seen before. The word choice is immaculate, and causes the reader to visualize the scenes, while the plot itself is fascinating. Keep up the good work, author!
This novel will take you on an emotional journey with descriptive, elaborate language. It’s quite dark, and down to the ground exploring the common feeling of grief, pain, self-hatred, and much more. Warning, the lavish description might drown you.
Adding this one in my library, keep up the fight Author. Gonna start reading this. 4/28/23
Honest review for Author: (you can hate me for what i write but i won't butter things up) 1: Your synopsis is 'trash'. Trust me i am trying to be very humble here, synopsis is supposed to be an overall idea of what story focus on, what is our MC is like and how will story devlop so far. It is suppose to give you overall idea of story without spoilers, but in your case!! Just read it yourself, you are smart enough to know. 2: Your Book name doesn't have that buzz word. I know since you are new author you will say a few dialogue about losing your originality or something... but trust me, All that speech of enlightenment won't value anything if your book doesn't get views and collection. 3: Your cover page is not that attractive; Even with the saying 'Dont judge a book by it's cover' 95% of readers still judge it by cover, so you need to put some work on it. 4: Their are novels who get hate for lacking world background, but in your case... you don't have a world background to start with. you are just writing two characters in blank plain and expecting the readers to imagine everything on their own. "That's not how it works". 5: Your way of writing is good but the vocabulary you use isn't. Just so you know, more than half of the readers here have English as their secondary language. So, i will suggest you to use some less fancy and more understandable words. 6; ummm.... i won't write that it's already been 1.6k words, ranting more will just rune my impression here. These are a few basic mistakes i found in your webnovel. I really love your story and way of writing. Hope you keep improving Thankyou for reading up to here.
Honestly I love how darks this story is also It’s nice that you described things a lot. 💯👌 It’s a great read I recommend it
This book is amazing! The authors writing style draws you in with great diction and vivid descriptions. The dark turn of the story totally took me by surprise. Overall, a fantastic read!