Lumen Turn

Well I can see that you mostly use first person point of view on this story. The flow of writing might be difficult if there are multiple character to describe at once and you have to shift the pov on different person. nonetheless, the rest is pretty decent and enjoyable. The pacing, vocabulary and grammar is good and I hope you will do well in the future.

Seems good and look promising ,writing is overall good and looking forward for more chapter[img=recommend][img=recommend]

This book is good. The story is interesting and the characters are nice. It's fun to read and it ends well. It's definitely worth 5 stars. Please write more chapters

Here just to give myself a review, I have a story outline ready and it will get really good later on i promise, a lot of epic battles, high fantasy elements, i will also upload many illustrations and many morally grey characters (which i love). Hope you all like what is to come ^.^

Seems like you have some pretty good ideas, High fantasy is hard to pull off but you seem to have a lot of imagination, i will be keeping a eye on your novel. Keep up the hard work.

this story is lightweight and nice for a good read. I like the characters names and their dynamic. One thing I would say is you should tell less and show more, but overall your story is well-constructed, keep up!

I love your story. I like your writing style. Looking forward to more chapters.

I love your story! has me hooked after 3 chapters. I wish there were more chapters. I think to get your story more out there a cover would be good. Also updating often other than that I am looking forward to more. The world background is what I like the most.

Hi author, I really like the beginning of this book. If you are not reading this book now you are missing out