vielr

(Also uploaded on RoyalRoad, this is the first time I'm writing a novel, so any feedback would be appreciated. I'll upload at least 1 chapter every Thursday. If I accidentally write too much then I'll be uploading multiple weekly.)

In the aftermath of the cataclysmic event that saw the world besieged by towering monoliths known as the Towers, humanity grapples with the harsh realities of its new existence. Among the survivors is Sebastian Azalith, a young man burdened by tragedy and forged in the crucible of despair.

Raised amidst the chaos and destruction wrought by the Towers, Sebastian finds himself adrift in a world devoid of hope and purpose. With the loss of his mother, crushed beneath the weight of the Towers' arrival, and the absence of his father, who vanished without a trace, Sebastian is left to fend for himself in a world turned upside down.

Forced into joining Varun Academy, a grim institution on the outskirts of civilization, Sebastian struggles to find his footing in a world that has left him behind. With no one to turn to and nowhere else to go, he reluctantly embarks on a journey of self-discovery and redemption, seeking solace in the only place he has left to call home.

As Sebastian grapples with the despair of his shattered world, he discovers a dark and forbidden power within himself—the ability to devour the life force of any living creature. With each life he consumes, Sebastian gains strength and power, his soul tarnished by the darkness that consumes him.

Leaving behind the safety of the academy, Sebastian ventures into the Towers, his heart heavy with the weight of his past and the uncertainty of his future. With each floor he conquers, he faces despair and agony, his soul torn asunder by the darkness that surrounds him.

But as Sebastian delves deeper into the depths of the Towers, he begins to unravel the mysteries of his past and unlock the true potential that lies dormant within him. With each victory he achieves, he grows stronger, more ruthless, and more determined to defy the odds and carve out his own destiny in a world consumed by darkness.

But as Sebastian's power grows, so too does the darkness that threatens to consume him. Haunted by visions of a future shrouded in despair, he must confront the ultimate truth—that the path to power comes with a price, and the line between saviour and destroyer grows ever thinner.

Blood Evolution: Devourer's Path to Power Levelling

I will be uploading minimum 1 chapter every Thursday.

There's a chance that I'll upload a few extra during the week if I get bored waiting until Thursday 😭

This chapter is just to ask for possible improvements. I would appreciate it if anyone has anything they'd like me to improve/change.

Is Sebastian okay as a character? I feel like he doesn't show too much emotion so I'm thinking of forcing him to communicate more in the upcoming chapters. 😭😭 But I'm not sure if I should, or just keep him like this.

It's my first time writing a novel so I'm still learning to write emotive characters </3.

Is there anything that you guys would like me to add? Classes? System changes? System shop? Inventory? Etc.

I'm thinking of updating the system for the awakened soon, so I've been thinking about what new features to add.

Should I give him more friends? They probably won't last long anyway 😭

One thing I've been considering is adding more depth to the world-building. For example, would you like to see more detailed descriptions of the Tower's environment, or perhaps more background on the Awakened Alliance and the academy?

I've also been thinking about how to develop the supporting characters. Should I give Marissa and "others" more backstory? Would you like to see more interactions that highlight their personalities and motivations? Or maybe descriptions of their looks? I want to make sure they feel as real and compelling as possible, even if their time in the story might be limited.

Additionally, I'm curious about your thoughts on the pacing. Do you feel like the story is moving too fast, too slow, or just right?

For me, I feel like it's going too slow and he should just spend all his time in the tower so I can see him devour everything, that's just me though.

Balancing action, character development, and world-building feels a bit difficult tbh, and I'd love to hear your feedback on how to improve.

Would you like to see more detailed fight scenes or more strategic elements? Also, how do you feel about the current balance between action and dialogue? Should I introduce more subplots or focus on the main storyline?

Thank you for reading so far, I appreciate it < 3

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