Shattered Innocence: Transmigrated Into a Novel as an Extra

Hello, Author here. In this thread, I will clarify some questions regarding the start of the book, and you can treat it as a Q&A as well. Firstly, the novel will seem a little odd to you at the start since it starts differently. But, I must insist that you read the free chapters, the first volume, until the end and bear with it a little since it is just an introduction to the work. I know at the start of the novel, Lucavion doesn't start as your typical main character of such novels, which is something I intended since, at the start of the novel, the main character is 14 years old and mentally unstable due to all the events surrounding him. Even though I know it may be frustrating to read a little, I also think that it is an accurate description of how a person who was put into such a position would think at those moments and the type of psychology that they would have. However, at the end of the first volume, his mentality and everything will have undergone a huge change, making it a lot more readable, and from then on, the story will stretch with many interpersonal relationships going on. For now, this is all I have to say about the book, and you may continue with your questions here. I will answer them if I can.

man!!! the story would have been perfect with some revenge but author made the MC too soft. ruined the story for me and what's the point of reincarnation when he no longer remembers his old memories

Bruh if you are going to write by using A.I. then make it less obvious. I am 43 chapters in, and it is painful how all the internal monologues are just repeated ideas in different wording. When other characters face off, like in chap 43, then it is obvious that an A.I. is narrating the emotions and dialogue. If you are not using A.I. then you are simply overdoing it - there are better ways to describe character emotions and development.

The writing is good and all, I actually really like the background and story progression since it seems to stray from the op mc cliche; however, there are firstly, some fillers that I cannot understand why they're there other than to make the readers irritated. On top of that, the novel doesn't need the transmigration tag because for as long as I read, few dozens chapters in, you could've removed the transmigration tag and the introduction chapter, and it would be the exact same thing, like there would be no major differences whatsoever. The tag itself feels like a cheap attempt at clickbaiting that unfortunately worked, reading this novel, for me, was like having fishbone stuck in your throat-- Like I know it supposed to be a tragedy and all, I can perfectly comprehend that, but at least, AT LEAST, makes it so that the transmigrator is actually unique somewhat compared to the native denizens.

Writing quality is superb Updating stability nothing to say Story and character development. If there were tragedy and slow paced tags I won’t be frustrated 49 chapters in and mc is still canon fodder The frustration is just killing me Everyone seems to bully mc alone and despite his so called star devouring (spoiler) some rank 3 bozo is like heaven while he’s earth(apparently not as talented it’s made to be) If you like slow paced novels where mc is traumatized in more than 30 chapters while growing like a snail this book is for you

Sigh again another good novel yet ruined by the MC’s personality. Apparently a whole grown man acts like a manchild. Gets “red faced” approaching probably younger women than him. This is getting cringier and cringier with chapters. I expected a more cold,calculative,ruthless approach not some “Lost child depressive stupidity” approach

The Author seems like going after money using ChatGpt(AI's)instead of focusing on story.I am on chapter 522 and he's still yet to go to Academy despite saying Academy this/that.I speed run the novel and I can say more than 50%chapter are useless(basically fillers).Same information are shown from multiple POV's and if there are new main female characters he read from novel then it takes 3-5 chapter to describe about them and what happened to them which is basically useless.Its a very slow progress storywise,When there seems to be some action , it takes 3-4 chapters for continuing that fight due to useless extra information, POV's.Other books would have finished many arcs by now but hes's busy filtring female MCs per arc in the name of saving them. I am just waiting to see how great of a deal Academy Arc turns out to be since given current power level up,he might overpower teachers and even principals.

I changed my mind, it's just getting ridiculous now. Not sure if he types in 100 words and asks chatgpt to make it a 1000, or what. The authors pacing is abysmal. 100% doing it just to fluff up chapter count.

I'm starting to lose hope in the webnovel community. So many good reviews about this one, praising the "good" writing style and quality. Following this, I had very high expectations, and well, it couldn't deliver. AI Slop. That's what this novel is. The writing is abysmally bad—stretching, word filler, flowery vocabulary, AI word choices, and so on. It's nearly impossible to immerse oneself in this; I had to drop it 10 chapters in. This isn't an anomaly. The author's other books are the same. They aren't slow; they're filled with filler and reek of LLM. Perhaps an interesting story lies beneath the mask of pretense, but I couldn't get through it. And don't misunderstand me. I don't mind authors using LLM to edit their grammar, spelling, and similar mistakes, but in this case, it's clear that the author wants as many words per chapter as possible. Once again, I was disappointed.

The story feels slow, with the author constantly reiterating the same points. Initially, I had high expectations because it seemed different from the typical MC template, but unfortunately, it hasn’t delivered. I’m currently at chapter 87, and nothing significant has happened. The author could have condensed the story into 47 chapters, but instead, it stretched out with lengthy inner monologues. It’s been challenging to overlook this, though I do like the protagonist’s power concept. Since I'm still at chapter 87, I can’t comment too much on that yet. To Darkness_Enjoyer, I just hope the you can cut down on the repeated points to improve the novel. For instance, G3 often repeats explanations but does it in an engaging way, so I never think of it as "yapping." If you’re unable to make these moments engaging, it may be better to cut them down. But ultimately, it's your choice it's your novel. I'm just a reader, and I don't have any experience in writing, so I may not fully understand the challenges writers face. Regardless, I hope you do well with it.

1. There is a clear use of AI in the writing. 2. The story relies too many tropes. For example, the Knight of Wind sparing the MC just because he likes the way his eyes look, despite being in a war. 3. The MC is inconsistent with his thoughts, philosophy, and morals. Jumping back and forth from being a "good" or "bad" guy. 4. This is a personal opinion of mine, but I absolutely hate the trope where, supposedly, your sword is an extension of your soul or who you are, etc. Which is present when the MC meets the blacksmith. Overall, I'm not a big fan of this story in particular. I'd rate it a 2/5.

five star from me, cuz why not. i enjoyed both of authors previous works. all the best for this book also.

Ai generated novel and author doesn’t even bother to hide it. Mc really is insufferable even for me, it was really good but after like 100 chapters when mc finally goes out of that forest and meets his to be harem members that is when it went from 8/10 to 3/10 for me. Like his every remark gets them to blush they way he speaks and how he grins and smirks every sentence for no reason. At every sentence every battle every convo. He is very annoying must be cuz its ai generated rhe repeated lines makes it worse. The story is also going downhill it is very slowpaced the writing was way better before now its just a ai generated mess and the author doesn’t even care at the very least remove the repeated lines. If u r really bored, got nothing to do read up to like 80-90 its pretty alright up till that point for timepass. You can drcide whether u wanna continue or drop it.

I may be biased due to reading the author other works (Hunter Academy: Revenge of the Weakest) This is very good start. Still too early to give my full thoughts of the story but from knowing the author previous work I know I'm going to love this story. One thing I love what the author does is he takes his time with the main character development and power level. I am so tired of reading a op main character who barley worked hard to obtain their power. shattered innocents we see the mc struggle and I am so excited to see how he will prevail and get back at everyone who wronged him. Maybe I'm just odd but I like seeing a main character who we see starts at the bottom and crawl their way to the top. Overall, I'm quite excited to see how this story will unravel. i do hope the author will have the main character have guy friends (I do not mean Bl lol) Typically with stories with harems the mc only surrounded by women. They don't have guy friends if they do it's like comedy relief. I hope I explain that well like I want the mc having his own group his bros. I hope explained what I thought well this was my first time writing a review so if I made a mistake cut me some slack.