The Hawk and The Flamebound Breaking Dawn
Mirabella Flamire, a humble sparrow, was born and grew up in a world where wings determine wealth, power, and hierarchy. She and her crew embarked on a journey to transport spices across the kingdom by sailing the Primrose in the sea of Ossian.
Meet Eros La Velle, the mischievous and esoteric Hawk King of Dusthaven, a sun-scorched southern kingdom. The man strode the land with a lazy smirk on his lips and a crooked grin in his eyes. With the glimmering golden hair and tantalizing sea blue orbs, even the blazing sun of the vast sky shies away from his wicked seduction by receding its rays in reverence.
Yet, a particular sparrow rejected the courting of a hawk and hopped away with a flick of its tail. Undeterred, the shameless king claimed his virtue was stolen by the little sparrow and insisted on building a nest together.
The sparrow, who is now called a promiscuous woman by the folks: "-_-"
An epic tale of fire and flight, where the truth buried under the sand is revealed, testing love and loyalty beyond the skies and beneath the ground.
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