In the opulent chaos of Ordania, Bram, a desperate orphan, dreams of reaching the legendary Island of Genesis—a place where trials forge the powerful and the divine. Amid a sea of ambition and despair, a fateful encounter with a mysterious noble girl changes everything, pulling him into a journey that promises power, peril, and secrets beyond imagination.

Driven by a  desire for power, Bram ventures to the Island of Genesis, where survival in its deadly trials promises unimaginable rewards.

This is my first time writing something so please bear with my mistakes and feel free to comment your thoughts

Isles of Divinity

ACTION

ADVENTURE

MAGIC

MYSTERY

DARK

SUPERPOWERS

SCARY

This is my first time writing a story
i would like you guys to give me any form of criticism if you find my story lacking so i can improve.

This is a strong and engaging story with a fascinating world, memorable characters, and high stakes. The mix of mythology, mystery, and survival creates a rich narrative, and the emotional depth adds to its appeal. With some refinements to pacing, action clarity, and character dynamics, this story has the potential to become a truly gripping tale.

Also Let Bram’s cleverness clash more with Orden’s distrust or Solveig’s straightforwardness.
And Arcia’s role as a leader could be more pronounced, perhaps with her struggling to manage the team’s tensions.

Rating: 8.5/10

It’s an excellent start with room to grow into an outstanding narrative!

The introduction and the pacing the storyline builds up is really good, it makes the reader feel more immersed and the foundation for the novel is pretty solid, I didnt find it boring nor did it seem like lazy writing. Even though it's relatively short It's still a wonderful 
Chapter. Keep them coming brother.