Pokemon: Sandstorm Elite

Five chapters have been released. Normally, this isn’t the kind of story I read, but since the author is the same one behind Pokémon: Gym Leader, I thought it would be interesting to check it out, especially since I quite like his work. The concept of a team based on the Sandstorm strategy is intriguing; however, I’m rather disappointed with how the story unfolds. We’re in a Pokémon world where battles between monsters are commonplace, yet I’m being told that hitting too hard is a problem because the opposing Pokémon might get hurt and that wouldn’t be very nice… ??? It feels like this isn’t even written by the same author. The NPCs’ reactions are bizarre—how can anyone dislike someone for fighting in a brutal manner when that’s the very essence of entertainment across all eras? The controversy feels forced, just like everything else in this fanfic. It started with an interesting premise, but the beginning is really off-putting. I might reconsider my opinion if the story improves later on, but for now, it’s a very poor start.

This story is fun and well-written. The pacing is solid, the characters are engaging, and the premise is interesting. there are a few flaws like the drama about beeing to forcefull, however thats minor. But the background story really drags it down, mainly because of this mysterious Rosa character the MC is missing. That wouldn’t be a problem on its own, but the way it’s handled just doesn’t work. Random characters suddenly show up and start blaming the MC, saying stuff like "Because of this Pokémon, you betrayed her!" and acting like I should already care. But I don’t. How could I? The story barely gives any background on Rosa just the MC crying her name a couple of times before expecting me to feel something. Instead of making me invested, this just makes the whole thing frustrating. The lack of buildup and proper context makes these dramatic confrontations feel forced rather than emotional. Instead of feeling bad for the MC, I just end up annoyed at the characters treating me like I should already be on board with the drama

Pacing feels a bit rushed in my opinion. Plot points have very little setup and finish just as fast. Characters are rather underdeveloped to the point if you replaced their names with relevant npc 1, supporting npc 25, and opponent npc 4 it’d make little difference. Personally the world building and interpretation of the Pokémon world is not for me. Pokemon are more like animals rather than intelligent creatures with their own characters. For exampled abandoned Pokémon are brought up and they’re interpreted as similar to abandoned pets, totally helpless and need to be euthanized rather than finding new habitats or forming their own groups. It’s just a personal preference but I don’t like how Pokémon are just hopeless animals that need humans in this fic. Pokemon themselves aren’t developed as characters and show very little personality or individuality. There’s also very little integration of Pokémon into the world. They don’t exist beyond battling and farming. The fic lacks the “this is the Pokémon world where Pokémon are part of everyday life” kind of feel. Another review also said it pretty well with how the audience act like they’ve not used to Pokémon violence. The world building just lacks the charm of Pokémon and is maybe more similar to a random generic brand monster battling franchise.

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Pretty good. This is the second fic that I've discovered that features an elite four as MC(aside from that fic where the MC is a normal type elite)🔥

Really like the character 🔥🔥🔥. I really like how the author created a backstory for this character and forces us readers to dread for the next chapters.

Who's gonna be the love interest of the MC

author should really remove that fckin slice of life tag fkkkk that baby alolan vulpix death will forever haunt me

honestly I came to read another slice of life-ish pokemon fanfic but this one actually has a plot and it looks good so far 👍🏾

Pokemon team based around sandstorms is interesting and different. Pacing feels rushed. The main issue I have with it is the whole "Mysterious Past" thing it has going on. The MC definitely has some past trauma, but it isn't explained and then something comes up, triggers his trauma, and nothing about what happened to cause the issues. Makes it really annoying to read

Translator, how bout forget this one and just focus on updating your other work like chosen ranger and im a farmer. Another translation of a Almighty type trainer.

The battle scences are amazing and move dynamics are great but this fanfic is not great at creating suspense and mystery. .. Sometimes its confusing in what the characters action really r. . has potential

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