The story was about the season of winter. It has a good set up for the chapters. It is unclear to me if the character in the first chapter is the main or the thing that appeared in chapter 2 is so I am a little confused.
For Grammar, there are only a few mistakes with spelling and periods so a proofreading may do you some good. Some word choices should also be re-arranged as it does lose me sometimes in the sentences but I pick up quickly. The Style is not bad. It is a good style to write with, although you may want to work on refining it as mentioned for clarity sake.
The Characters, Well, there's only two so far. They seem like poets if im being honest, though this is two chapters. I am not exactly sure where the plot is going with the characters we have right now so I can't even say too much about them . There is not really any characters interacting in the chapters; however, you could say that chapter 2 has some slight interactions through that memory thing.
For the World background, well, it's a winter season from what I can gather and it seems to be the theme here. There is a great job done in making us see the things that are going on there and the scenery.
Overall: I think this is something that has room for improvement to maintain a story but it is not a bad one. With some refinement to the Grammar and style, it can be a fabulous tale.
16 days ago
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NewbieReader7
The novel has great potential with intriguing characters. The power system is also quite great. The start is looking good.....Looking forward to new chapters.....
The story was about the season of winter. It has a good set up for the chapters. It is unclear to me if the character in the first chapter is the main or the thing that appeared in chapter 2 is so I am a little confused. For Grammar, there are only a few mistakes with spelling and periods so a proofreading may do you some good. Some word choices should also be re-arranged as it does lose me sometimes in the sentences but I pick up quickly. The Style is not bad. It is a good style to write with, although you may want to work on refining it as mentioned for clarity sake. The Characters, Well, there's only two so far. They seem like poets if im being honest, though this is two chapters. I am not exactly sure where the plot is going with the characters we have right now so I can't even say too much about them . There is not really any characters interacting in the chapters; however, you could say that chapter 2 has some slight interactions through that memory thing. For the World background, well, it's a winter season from what I can gather and it seems to be the theme here. There is a great job done in making us see the things that are going on there and the scenery. Overall: I think this is something that has room for improvement to maintain a story but it is not a bad one. With some refinement to the Grammar and style, it can be a fabulous tale.
The novel has great potential with intriguing characters. The power system is also quite great. The start is looking good.....Looking forward to new chapters.....