I was impressed with the world background you created in this story, but the quality of the writing is still a little lacking, It's quite neat, but it would be better if you studied diction, and tried to describe things more vividly, keep fighting!!
15 hours ago
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SubtleBite
Your writing is quite neat, I will wait for the next chapters, keep fighting!is such an addicting webnoevl. the storyline was good and also the cherecters emotions were chosen vividly. I would live to read more
20 hours ago
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Dinash_Kathirkama_
Good start. Weak MC growing stronger. Take time in building characters make the story better. ...................................................................................................................
a day ago
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Yuji_Byakko
*****************************Off to a great start. Looking forward to reading more as the story develops. Keep at it! ***************************
I was impressed with the world background you created in this story, but the quality of the writing is still a little lacking, It's quite neat, but it would be better if you studied diction, and tried to describe things more vividly, keep fighting!!
Your writing is quite neat, I will wait for the next chapters, keep fighting!is such an addicting webnoevl. the storyline was good and also the cherecters emotions were chosen vividly. I would live to read more
Good start. Weak MC growing stronger. Take time in building characters make the story better. ...................................................................................................................
*****************************Off to a great start. Looking forward to reading more as the story develops. Keep at it! ***************************