The last son of the forgotten

Hey man I finally got around to reading your story and first off I wanna start by saying congratulations the first step, putting your work out, is always the hardest one. So I'm proud of you man. I think your story has a lot of potential to be great with just a few minor tweaks in flow and spell checks. Also make sure to separate your dialogue, narration, exposition, description, action, and summary that way your audience can know which part is which, there was times where it was all jumbled up. A good way to do this is italics for inner monologues and indenting for narrations, descriptions, etc. also your first chapter is your most important chapter so if you want readers to be hooked you have to tell your main character/protagonist character'a goal from the beginning, meaning somewhere in chapter 1, or else readers will be lost. Overall though I like the premise of your story and I can see the vision! Keep it up man, you got this!