Hunt/Dreams

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This story has some seriously strong atmosphere.The writing is really vivid and cinematic, which makes the action scenes feel alive and intense. But at the same time, it leans a little too heavily into dramatic prose in almost every paragraph, which can make the impact of the big moments blur together. Not every line needs to be poetic (I do the same mistake) sometimes the simple stuff hits harder when it’s surrounded by quieter beats. Also, while the characters are intriguing their internal voices could be more distinct. Right now, the narration style feels a little too similar across the board. The worldbuilding is rich, but there are a few moments where exposition dumps slow things down or feel a bit crammed in. Letting more of the world unfold through natural character moments or dialogue might help the pacing. And speaking of dialogue, it could use a little more bite. A sharper edge or more personality in how characters speak would take the tension up a notch. Overall, though, it’s a strong start with real emotional depth and a lot of promise. With some polish, this could really shine.

great novel with a lot potential, keep updating

the novel has nice narrative, the first chapter gave me a bloodborne vibe. keep it up[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

great novel you got there, good writing just too compressed for my taste, and author let your stories shine more alright!

good novel! i love the plot, and love the characters. HIGHLY RECOMMEND, everyone!

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This is not a genre I usually read, but this novel is so intriguing. Kudos to the author for creating it. I will keep an eye on it in the future

okay so the writing quality and details are perfact i read two chapters and I think it's great no flows from my side

It seem to me that the story has a slow build up but the story is there. It's just that, I don't really get the kick, you know the 'urgh!' that I wan't from a story, or maybe I was just expecting a very strong start. There still a room for improvement, and we'll see that in the future. Overall it a great work.

honestly ,the prologue is good and it detailed the mc emotions . the following chapters also has great grammars, but that's also where the flaw is,the descriptions takes up most of the chapter and give little space for the main elements , but I believe you know what you want to portray,or maybe it's because I like fast paced novels. it's great anyways and has chance for improvement . keep it up 💪

After reading up to 5 chapter. So far I must say that I'm impressed by story so far. The writing is good with no grammar issues. A small criticism I have is that the chapters are quite long. Maybe cutting them down into small paragraph. overall, enjoying it so far

This is good stuff honestly, 👍 I kinda like bruce 😂😂, but the character development and the world building are kinda moving at different speeds but that's okay, I'll like to see the how it plays out later on

Heyyy! This book is great, you going places. Though I'd be honest I'm not really into this typa genre, I'd rather say the prologue really hooked me and made me read further, lol Goodluck author and I strongly recommend the book!