Cyberpunk System in Marvel

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Okay story if you want something to read with little attention. Let’s start with the good stuff. Updates pretty often as of chapter 14, and has good grammar and all that stuff. Has decent plot points. Onto the critiques/complaints. Cyberpunk system without cyberpunk values. A bit disappointing. The mc lost any sense of self after the first boxing match. Most of his actions are dictated by the system. Even when he doesn’t want to follow the optional missions SOMETHING has to happen that makes his follow it anyways. The way that each plot line is added feels too janky and forced. System gives a new implant with every other mission. 100% gives vibes of going off the rails too fast due to having the MC lose it too soon thus killing the majority of roads that the fic can take. My largest complaint is the forced stupidity of the MC. He has 9INT which was only. A few points behind his professional boxer level physical stats at the start, thus he’s stupid as hell. It’s just a plot device to force him to make dumb mistakes to add in plot or give the enemy choices. It’s also used so the author doesn’t need to deal with a character that thinks beyond “ooooh shiny”. it’s also super inconsistent, as in he can hyper analyse Jessica jones down to identifying her alcoholic tics but isn’t able to think to throw away his phone that clearly has a virus, thinking “I’ll deal with it later” *doesn’t deal with it later*. I have no hope for him to get any smarter because the author himself has said that he like writing him dumb, so there’s that. It’s not a good fic but it’s not a bad one. It’s pretty eh. For sure salvageable though, so I’ll keep my eye on it. Maybe I’m judging it too harshly for a WebNovel fic but standards are standards.

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a good fic with potential but a bit too random. Characters are introduced haphazardly. the writing is good . the grammar is good too. the quests make no sense. he is too accepting of his situation

One word, PERFECT! I mean I went in and thought "eh another cyberpunk fic hope it goes well" And went out like "Where's the next chapter?!!!!! Kehahahaha!! " So that sums it up 😇

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