The origin of om
Author: Dheeraj_Devrari
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In a silent village by the river, a boy named Bajrang sharpens his body and spirit—not for glory, but for peace.
His only family, Kira, is taken away by a shadow from a past no one speaks of.
Broken and bleeding, Bajrang is found by an old hermit who shows him a path lost in time—Ranakala: a way of battle where strength comes not from rage, but from silence, suffering, and surrender.
As the fire within him stirs, and the past begins to rise, Bajrang must choose—will he remain the boy fate tried to bury…
…or rise as the warrior fate fears the most?
And readers, the episode will come in 2 days and there is no fixed time for it, it can come anytime, but it will definitely come in 2 days.
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Your story beautifully captures the essence of brother-sister bond and the innocence of childhood. The vivid descriptions of nature and the characters' emotions are well-done. Bajarang and Kira's relationship is sweet and natural, and their dialogues are engaging. The story has a good pace, and the mystery surrounding Bajarang's father and the stranger's shadow adds intrigue. However, more details about the characters' backgrounds and motivations could enhance the story. The plot could also benefit from more twists and turns to keep readers engaged. The writing style is descriptive, and the use of sensory details is effective. The themes of love, innocence, and curiosity are well-explored. With some refinement, this story could be even more captivating. Consider adding more emotional depth and a clearer conclusion to make it more impactful. Overall, it's a promising start, and with further development, it could be a compelling read.
"Your story beautifully captures the essence of sibling love and childhood innocence. The vivid descriptions of nature and the characters' emotions are well-done. Bajarang and Kira's relationship is sweet and natural, and their dialogues are engaging. The story has a good pace, and the mystery surrounding Bajarang's father and the stranger's shadow adds intrigue. However, more details about the characters' backgrounds and motivations could enhance the story. Adding more twists and turns to the plot could keep readers engaged. The writing style is descriptive, and the use of sensory details is effective. The themes of love, innocence, and curiosity are well-explored. With some refinement, this story could be even more captivating. Consider adding more emotional depth and a clearer conclusion to make it more impactful. Overall, it's a promising start, and with further development, it could be a compelling read. Some potential areas for improvement include: - Adding more character depth and backstory - Introducing plot twists and conflicts - Developing a clearer resolution or conclusion With these tweaks, your story could truly shine."
What a good story it is, I liked the love and care between the brother and sister in it, this story is very good. And it is a very interesting story, moreover, Indian culture is also seen in it.
Your story is very good, you are a very good writer, you should publish the story daily so that we get to read the story. You have written the story with complete emotion, you are a wonderful writer
Your story is very good, your writing is also very good, you have portrayed the character of the bajar very well and you have also written the suspense very well, you are a very good writer, your story will be popular soon
How awesome your story is, you write very well, you write very nicely, you have won my heart, you are great. You have incorporated many cultures of India in it. From Bharatvarsha, Jai Hind.