Smurfing Immortal
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A selfish 23 year old Pro Gamer is fired from his team for getting caught on a live stream using a cheat table and is dumped by his girlfriend, a fellow team mate. When he thinks things couldn't get any worse, he dies and transmigrates to a different and fantastical world very much like our own modern world, but incredibly different at the same time - Cultivation is possible, but it is only available to a few certain hidden clans.
Here in this world, he encounters a beautiful wife and their family of 2 that he sits at the head of, in dire straits and bullied from all sides. To survive in this new world he needs to overcome his own selfishness, embrace and accept others and lead his family to rise to prominence and glory. With a little help from the cheat software he reincarnated with, the adventures of a Smurfing immortal cultivator are about to begin.
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*Remember, this review is based on the first five chapters* Constructive Criticism: Try to make the first 2-3 chapters flow better, they felt like you had no motivation when you wrote them. Please keep us updated on when you will come back and don't drop this novel. Also, I feel that the Character Design of the MC starts out with nothing and does not really get build uppon until arriving into the new world... trying to give him a bit more personality, in the beginning, would be better.;,;. Positive Feedback: I saw no errors while reading (unless I pointed them out), and I like how you have built the system so far.;,;. Personal Feedback: I will continue to read this novel at a later time, I hope that it won't be too long until you continue this novel... if it takes longer than 6 months from the most recent chapter posted (even if that is a chapter to notify us of your plans with this book) I will remove it from my library.;,;.
when you can update again? i waiting for it.........................................................................................................................
Only 5 chapters in so far for this review. Seems from the start so far to be a solid story. Nothing too outlandish. Going to keep reading and hope it gets even better than it is now!
Yay.........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................Great!