Tycoon - Seeking to Live a Modest Life in a Fantasy World

Damn, it seems like some readers need context from reviews before reading the novel and not look for criticism instead. So, I'm here to help out those kinds of people, and the author to This story feels like it's gonna be a long-winded one, which is what I am looking for as I do not want novels that abruptly end for no proper reason. Writing quality is the usual, few mistakes here and there, not too shabby. The character design seems to be something that eats up a lot of words within this story, which isn't all too bad considering that it adds to the flavor of the novel itself. Heck, I could tell that it would go into a slice of life route when he gets tremendously powerful. Overall, a fun read. SO FAR

Meh. the story is pretty interesting and the like, but what ticks me off is that the M.C is brain dead in life and combat. trying to run against someone with psycokinesis thats not a smart move. if it were a "true scene" rather than a novel, there would be only two ways to escape. 1. Be saved in a nonsensical miracle way. 2. Disrupt the spell temporal and send a super fireball, and where they are dead or not, im pretty sure he would have more than enough time to walk to the exit leisurely while killing the weak knights.

Great story with a great plot and lots of chaos. At times, I want to just hit and scold this MC for overlooking the system function or lack of curiosity in trying to figure/take advantage of the system. Then againg, he is 14 years old and no common sense... I hope that this novel doesn't go the "fighting every one by my self and i will become the best fighter" stuff and focus more on the trading system and being more a of merchant. I have always wondered why MCs have to do everything themselves... you got the system and you got money... have someone do the dirty work. Yes, be strong and keep it hush hush as your ace card and then sorround your self with other people who are capable and not just another subordinate character (which is always weak) that does nothing with out the main characterand on top of that the MC has to babysit them. Sorry... this are my hopes and frustration with some novel and hopefully this novel will be able to blow my mind and rise.....up ...

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Good start, Good pace and a dumb mc equals a great story. Xjdjxjdndndjsnsjzisjndjdidjdndjidejdjixjdenxijddndjdjdnxjiddjfhvgfhjvcfgjvfdfhgxdssfhjkhbbccfgbcxhbchjhhxvjhj.

Would’ve been great if just the author made the guy use the system correctly all of this just makes the word count longer and pretty fucking boring got this pretty good system and uses it to get back to the woman that killed him and “help her” I mean the girl clearly backstabbed him and even spoken that she’s had enough of him would’ve been such a faster plot that way this is just tiring to read so if your in to slow paced story read this

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Great novel so far. I like the world building plus the early foreshadowing.The system is really cool with many features. Looking forward to more chapters.

Excellent story, very few grammar errors, none of which are jarring. Story has a nice flow to it and is easy to read. No broken English here!

Oh my god.. is this story drop?😣 This really god story development. Very good flow not fast and not too slow either. I can said that, this is very realistic story if me or us take MC place.. very good if can say..

Slow paced story with unlikable MC. First of all, the MC grows stronger with a system, as usual, but what really makes a difference in his strengh level are Classes that he equips and not the Merchant System itself. The System only sells and fuses these classes for him, so for the most part it's there as a way for him to have a cheat class. The whole Merchant System ends being a secondary plot device that has little effect on the story, except for the purchase of Classes and things that he mindless sells for a quick buck, like breads. The MC personality is terrible. For the most times he's a gullible beta male that can be bullied by anyone, similar to japanese novels. But sometimes he snaps and becomes some ruthless killer, only to become beta JP Mc again a few chapters later. It's inconsistent and weird. Choose the inocent ***** boy hero or the ruthless killer type, he can't be both. At max he can have character progression and go from ***** to ruthless, but not have a murderous switch like this novel. The pacing is slow and things happen very slowly, with a lot of meaningless written content in between. For a novel with a system that depends on class levels and killing monsters, there is very little action in these 60 chapters I've read, but there's a lot of random exposition or explaining of things that didn't have to be explained. I don't know if this is the first novel the author has written, and if it is I commend you for the idea and writting style. Unfortunately the good ideas you had for this novel were not properly explored. Try to organize the MC personality and character progression with adjectives and see if his actions are not contradicting his personality for example. In regards to levels of power, if you use a game like system where experience is needed, you must use this system often or it becomes meaningless. He has changed classes several times but only had one battle were he got the experience and it was quite dull, he only used an OP skill and killed everything. You could even make him win exp when making merchant transactions and this would made your novel quite better. Anyways, I hope you can organize your ideas in a better way in the next one.

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