Monsters Within: Legendary Dragon's Heart
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Placed in a world with Cultivation and Monsters.
A Half-Human and Half-Beast child, Chase. Being abandoned in the Crimson Forest, he is found and raised by a wandering Drunk Old Man that is a member of the Violet Family.
Although he grew up as a healthy boy, Chase did not have the talent to Cultivate a simple technique that the Violet Family provides and has since then been the only Failure Child of the Family.
But his life changed drastically when he was finally able to cultivate and integrated his soul with a Legion of Legendary Monsters.
Follow the Journey of a Young Boy that has been called as the Ultimate Failure become the Most Powerful Man in all of the 12 Worlds.
Release Rate: Unknown(Hiatus)
Author's Note: This is a plain cultivation Novel, please don't read it. If you ever read it, don't blame me if you get too absorbed on it. I don't have that much money to pay for your medical fees if you ever get sick reading this.
Also, I am NOT an English Language Native, so you can expect some errors on my grammars and some little to no typos.
IMPORTANT NOTE: The story will get better as you read the next chapters.
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The Book Cover is not mine. The credits all goes to the Creator.
If the owner wants me to take it down, then I will gladly do so.
*seen**read**halfway the first chapter i stopped**back to cover**yep original*hot effing d*mn. saved. downloaded. now waiting for another chapter.
*Sees the title* *Thinks its a fanfiction* *clicks it* *reads one chapter* *go back to cover page* *sees its original* *screams until lungs gave out* *calms down* *saves in library* *download the novel* *waits for next chapter*
Hey Guys, BoredPanda here. Monster Within is my VERY FIRST NOVEL, I really hope some of my reader give their opinion on my writing style. Well I just want to let you guys know that I rated my Writing Quality 4 STARS, this is because even though I use basic english, I'm pretty sure I have no(or have but very little)wrong grammar, also I think I conveyed everything alright. In the stability updates, I gave 5 Stars, well as you can see, I update almost everyday. In Story Development, though the Pace is a bit slow, I'm pretty sure it's progressing quite well, so I gave it 5 stars. In character design, I gave 3 Stars, that is because I have given very little details about other characters, I only focused on the Protagonist but don't worry, I will give details about them soon. And lastly, world backround, I'm pretty sure that you all already know that the setting of my Story is a FANTASY WORLD... That's right, Spirit Energy, Cultivation, Beast and such exist there so I gave it a whooping 5 STARS... Also I Want To Thank All My Readers(If I have Some) To The Bottom Of My Kokoro(Heart)..Hahaha Thats All Mua Mua~
It's quite good and I hope it is not on hiatus .............................................................................................. Update faster author
This makes me sad, not because it's bad. But because it is so good! the fact that english is not your first language and you still managed to write out a cohesive story is impressive. There are english language speakers who can't do that. Your use of the english language is great and for the purposes of webnovels you shouldnt be concerned over it. If you really want something to work on then theres only two things, work on being more descriptive in how you explain someones emotions or more subtler events. When possible try to get readers to imagine what the person is feeling/thinking through suggestion rather than just straight out telling them. The other thing is make an outline for where you want the story to go. Even if it is just an outline for the first arc, spend an hour to outline it out from beginning to end and use that as a reference when you are writing the chapters. over all, very good!
Writing Quality: i’ll give 4 stars. Aside from some grammatical errors and mispelled words, Author did a good job as I could imagine what happened which is good. Stability updates: Since this story was published a few days ago I couldn’t really tell if it’ll have a consistent updates but I hope author wont drop this story midway. So Im giving it 4.5 star because so far I like it. Story Development: Im giving it 5 star because I like it. Though the concept is common I hope author would give a lot of twist and turns in this story to make it more interesting and different from other cultivation novels. Character Design: since there wasnt many characters yet, I’ll focus on the protagonist. I like Chase as I thought he is some kind of proud kid that never had the slightest grievances in his young heart but the stealing part of the essence stone caught me off guard. Though I was wondering how did he do that since those stones were so rare. World Background: so far I like it. Overall, the story was good. Though the story isnt that new I know author had his own spices to make it unique from others. Tho some words are redundant but theres always room for improvement. I always prefer quality over quantity. I know it was hard to detect one owns error so I hope this help in some ways. Keep up the good work! 👍🏻
The writing quality is relatively pleasant to read and it contain enough balance of exposition and character interaction. While it does use the template start it execute it gracefully creating a well flowing novel that can entertain the reader. Pro 1. Well flowing story despite using template development 2. Relatable character positioning 3. Relatively pleasant read in term of grammar and spellings Weak 1. template development 2. a jump in character power in early chapter
it's actually quite a pleasant and attractive story so far. The father and son both have the habit of not telling the truth! That adds depth even in just the first chapter... and reveals alot about the characters. There's a lot that better proof reading could improve, or getting a friend to read through your work. But that doesn't take away from the good story, and not many readers actually care! Lol... Advice though, make sure you post every calendar day (according to China GMT+8 timezone) if you want more in-app visibility. Webnovel algorithm prioritises novels that have daily updates for 7 consecutive days.
Begins like most novels with the kid being weak but that’s due to his young age. The novel shows great promise and there are a little bits of grammatical errors, but hey who cares about that when your here to enjoy a novel not mark an English paper! So yeah I’ll add more to this review once the chapters flow in. It’s pretty good so far and looking forward to the twists and turns author will pull.
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Your novel seems interesting just a little bit I'd add is that you have tiny grammatical errors just a little enhancement is required.the writing is somehwat great
This is your very first novel? Da*n! You are really talented. I felt like I was reading the typical cultivation novel, not originals. You paced it rather well and I like your characters design. No big issue with the writing style and stability of updates. Easily understand
First of all me and the MC have the same name so there is 5 stars for that. The overall story is not bad just a lot of gaps in knowledge of when, where, and how did he get there. Seeing as I only read up to chapter 4 the author has plenty of time to get there. The writing a bit off, but still easily read. The MC definitely strongish right away so if you don't like that then don't read. Overall I think it's a good story and I would recommend giving it a try.
Interesting story with a good amount of potential. We can't find any good-hearted MC's with good character anymore. Seems we are obsessed with evil. I added it to my library. My only issues were a few grammatical issues that forcefully pulls us away from the immersion.
It had a lot of potential, be sure to use that, I wasn't able to get too deep into it because I'm on a tight schedule wo please forgive my lack of info, but you did a good job.