Talento pero le falta desarrollo a la historia, aunque no está mal el estilo de escritura, el hecho que sea rápido hace que uno no se canse de leer pero también le falta a la relación entre erza y el, solo son así por que si según la historia sin ningún desarrollo real
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CrystalAngel
I loved it. Y/N is awesome. But I wish it could be someone else rather than erza. It could be Mira here instead or else you could change it later like ya he liked erza and erza liked him little too, but later she met her childhood friend and she started liking him instead and y/n finds out that Mira liked him since childhood but didn't want to tell. It can go on like this. Just some words. Your story is very nice. I really really loved it.
Talento pero le falta desarrollo a la historia, aunque no está mal el estilo de escritura, el hecho que sea rápido hace que uno no se canse de leer pero también le falta a la relación entre erza y el, solo son así por que si según la historia sin ningún desarrollo real
I loved it. Y/N is awesome. But I wish it could be someone else rather than erza. It could be Mira here instead or else you could change it later like ya he liked erza and erza liked him little too, but later she met her childhood friend and she started liking him instead and y/n finds out that Mira liked him since childhood but didn't want to tell. It can go on like this. Just some words. Your story is very nice. I really really loved it.
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