Beyond the Mask

it's a bit early to review however I believe this novel has great potential, the storyline is original and it really grabbed me within just 6 chapters. The author seems like a great person as well so that's another plus. I hope to see you in the top 50 soon :)

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The premise itself is good, and the characters in MC's new world are interesting, especial So Won. If it's going to become *cough cough* BL *cough cough cough* I'd eagerly be following along. It's fine if it's not, though, I could just silently ship the characters from the safety of my couch ^0^ I read past chapter 3, and though there were still some tricky parts, the writing becomes much better from there. I strongly recommend for any author to use Grammarly before publishing (and no, I'm not getting paid to endorse it this damn much). I have it installed in Chrome, it's my last line of defense before releasing a chapter. Here, there were still minor errors in the first two chapters that I didn't address because I'm pretty sure the free version of Grammarly would catch them just fine. That said, author, please take this as a gesture of goodwill because I saw in the forums how worried you were-- Chapter 1: lion and his songs that --> and WITH his songs that the 75,000 seats in the stadium were full --> were FILLED (to capacity). Kim Chun Ha appeared on stage --> make it "onstage" -- no space a 19-year-old boy with black hair and green eyes of 179cm entered -- like this, it sounds like it's his eyes that's 179cm, so... --> a 19-year-old boy OF 179cm, with black... they needed to take a sleep --> EITHER needed to sleep OR needed to take a nap Jae Hyun decided to tell HER --> tell HIM In fact, I have already informed... --> you forgot to add the opening quotation mark "In fact... Do you even know dance? And just saying but when you agreed to give me your voice --> Do you even know how to dance (not sure if this is what you meant, but "know dance" doesn't sound right) --> make the next statement stronger by simply starting with "When you agreed to give..." --> delete "and just saying" He ignored what he had just told him before look at him and talk. --> (Jae Hyun) ignored Chun Ha's words (I'd suggest naming at least one of the characters in a sentence if they have the same gender; it's to avoid confusion about who's doing what) --> and simply looked at him before speaking. Kim Chun Ha's anger lashed his mind and blew up. --> I don't understand what you mean by "lashed his mind." Maybe it's best if you just say (his) anger blew up. I make you regret being born --> I'LL make you... a shot was heard --> a shot sounded OR rang out (to avoid the passive "was heard") Once he would be cured --> Once HE'S cured Jae Hyun had a pinch in his heart --> Jae Hyun's heart constricted Chapter 2: He tried to sit down, --> sit UP his body gave up to him --> up ON him his agency—if you say so—saved --> did you mean "if you could call them that"? Fake to sleep? Hid? --> Fake sleep --> Hide Think to something --> Think OF something and the panic gradually spread to him --> and his panic gradually spread (could use a different word here imo). He was going to tell them their home truths! --> "home truths" seems to be an idiomatic expression in French? Not sure, but it doesn't translate well, I would suggest a more common phrase like "tell them what's what" Sorry I didn't force you. --> Sorry, I shouldn't have forced you/pushed you too hard "Am I still dreaming?", though he. --> he thought. --> a comma is not needed if the dialogue itself ends with a punctuation mark Great, already that he wasn't very tall --> ...he wasn't very tall to start with Was it a contribution for being jealous --> ...a retribution for... What year and date are it today --> What year is it? What's the date today? --- That's as far as I've gone editing. I really hope this would be of some help, it's not my intention to make you feel pressured or anything, but I'm sorry if that's how it turns out. Best of luck from here on out as well :)

All around a great novel really lovr the story and the characters, also you usee my name in one of your chapters so that deserves 5 stars alone.

Just from the 3 initial description chapters, I can guess that you have it all planned and prepared. At least most of it! So no worries about it getting dropped right! That's what readers expect most from new original novels. It is very Interesting. I didn't find any small mistakes. Good luck! Keep going!

This might be early but the synopsis got me hooked already. The plot is interesting and I hope that it would progress even better in the future!

Its a pretty good story, the writing needs a bit of work as I have found a few mistakes here and there. But overall the story great and has potential. Keep on writing

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It’s a great start looking for more ch.7 I liked how you used real life songs .👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

Great potential too early to say really 140 characters oh well here I go .................................. . ..............................

The plot is very interesting. You really write well and scenes are well written as well. I'll be happy to learn from you, too. I so admire this novel of yours. Quite a plot you got there. Really looking forward to more chapters. ❤❤❤

Let's start with your writing quality. Maybe my standards are too high, but your sentences are too long (some parts are honestly unnecessary) and some phrases are misplaced. I suggest you read about grammar rules on misplaced modifiers. You should also edit your usage of punctuations, so you can seperate your long sentences better. You're also somehow using some words wrongly. For example in first chapter: "Is that anyway to talk to me? I remind you that without me you would be nothing!" You can rewrite it as: "Is that how you're supposed to talk to me? Let me remind you, you would be nothing without me!" There are more errors, but I'll move on to the next. Story Development. The reason why he died is because he wanted to end the contract. So they blackmail him, then they kill him and the reason is too shallow-- he wanted to end the contract. Since this is under realistic fiction, he will only be blacklisted at most or more blackmail will be used. To make it better, why don't you add more enmity for the main lead. You also didn't mention how he adjusted and stuff. Character design. It's a bit confusing to read since the personality of other's aren't that distinct. But it's okay. World Background. It's somehow clear. Overall, it's good.

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